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"MORTON, ALFRED C (AL)" <acmorton@att.com> Sat, 27 January 2018 13:48 UTC

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From: "MORTON, ALFRED C (AL)" <acmorton@att.com>
To: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>, "draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt.all@ietf.org" <draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt.all@ietf.org>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Thanks Meral, we'll make these edits in the
working version.

Kathleen and Al

From: Meral Shirazipour [mailto:meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com]
Sent: Friday, January 26, 2018 8:32 PM
To: draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt.all@ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org
Subject: Gen-ART Telechat Call review of draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-15

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft.

For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq><https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=http-3A__wiki.tools.ietf.org_area_gen_trac_wiki_GenArtfaq-253E&d=DwQFAg&c=LFYZ-o9_HUMeMTSQicvjIg&r=OfsSu8kTIltVyD1oL72cBw&m=sWfwhEulYHN7F-HqzfSmxg30PDwIdzHEJzBX847Tydo&s=WMK_psXzG78XKTPKkxKERL8jUGz2kjGQQ6zfYyuLdMs&e=>.

Document: draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-15
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2018-01-26
IETF LC End Date: 2017-12-04
IESG Telechat date: 2018-02-08

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Informational  RFC .

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-few occurrences: "pervassive"--->"pervasive"
-[Page 6], Sec 1.1, "were were built "---->"were built "
-[Page 12] , "scaleability"--->"scalability" x2
-[Page 16] , "unaccessible"--->"inaccessible"
-[Page 29] ,"depening"--->"depending", "permited"--->"permitted "
-[Page 31], "rasises"---->"raises", "encyption"---->"encryption", "visibilty"--->"visibility"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
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