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Re: [Gen-art] [kitten] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-kitten-rfc5653bis-06

Greg Hudson <ghudson@mit.edu> Sat, 27 January 2018 02:13 UTC

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To: Weijun Wang <weijun.wang@oracle.com>, Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] [kitten] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-kitten-rfc5653bis-06
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On 01/23/2018 06:43 PM, Weijun Wang wrote:
> I've uploaded an updated version at
> 
>   http://cr.openjdk.java.net/~weijun/rfc5653bis/draft-ietf-kitten-rfc5653bis-07.html

This is a great format for reviewing these changes; thanks for
generating it.

Line 416 does not capitalize "optional" in "optional services", but
lines 385 and 391 do.

Lines 422 and 424 should probably capitalize "should".  Line 429 should
probably capitalize "may".

At line 598, I would lean towards leaving "MUST" in lowercase as we are
describing an application requirement, not prescribing one.

Line 1174, I would leave "MAY" in lowercase.

Line 1129, "may" should probably be capitalized.

Line 1369, I would leave "MAY" alone as this seems more descriptive than
prescriptive.

Line 3221's use of "SHOULD" is prescriptive, but there's no other way to
request the default QOP.  So I would leave it lowercase (or change the
wording, but I'm not trying to open any more cans of worms).

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