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Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Sat, 27 January 2018 01:32 UTC

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From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft.

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Document: draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-15
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2018-01-26
IETF LC End Date: 2017-12-04
IESG Telechat date: 2018-02-08

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Informational  RFC .

Major issues:
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
-few occurrences: "pervassive"--->"pervasive"
-[Page 6], Sec 1.1, "were were built "---->"were built "
-[Page 12] , "scaleability"--->"scalability" x2
-[Page 16] , "unaccessible"--->"inaccessible"
-[Page 29] ,"depening"--->"depending", "permited"--->"permitted "
-[Page 31], "rasises"---->"raises", "encyption"---->"encryption", "visibilty"--->"visibility"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com

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