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Re: [Gen-art] [kitten] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-kitten-rfc5653bis-06

Weijun Wang <weijun.wang@oracle.com> Mon, 29 January 2018 01:28 UTC

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From: Weijun Wang <weijun.wang@oracle.com>
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Date: Mon, 29 Jan 2018 09:26:08 +0800
Cc: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>, kitten <kitten@ietf.org>, gen-art <gen-art@ietf.org>, "Joel M. Halpern" <jmh@joelhalpern.com>, draft-ietf-kitten-rfc5653bis.all@ietf.org
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] [kitten] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-kitten-rfc5653bis-06
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Thanks
Weijun

> On Jan 27, 2018, at 10:12 AM, Greg Hudson <ghudson@mit.edu> wrote:
> 
> On 01/23/2018 06:43 PM, Weijun Wang wrote:
>> I've uploaded an updated version at
>> 
>>  http://cr.openjdk.java.net/~weijun/rfc5653bis/draft-ietf-kitten-rfc5653bis-07.html
> 
> This is a great format for reviewing these changes; thanks for
> generating it.
> 
> Line 416 does not capitalize "optional" in "optional services", but
> lines 385 and 391 do.
> 
> Lines 422 and 424 should probably capitalize "should".  Line 429 should
> probably capitalize "may".
> 
> At line 598, I would lean towards leaving "MUST" in lowercase as we are
> describing an application requirement, not prescribing one.
> 
> Line 1174, I would leave "MAY" in lowercase.
> 
> Line 1229, "may" should probably be capitalized.
> 
> Line 1369, I would leave "MAY" alone as this seems more descriptive than
> prescriptive.
> 
> Line 3221's use of "SHOULD" is prescriptive, but there's no other way to
> request the default QOP.  So I would leave it lowercase (or change the
> wording, but I'm not trying to open any more cans of worms).
>

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