Re: [Gen-art] Genart Last Call review: draft-ietf-6man-grand

Robert Sparks <rjsparks@nostrum.com> Thu, 17 June 2021 13:37 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart Last Call review: draft-ietf-6man-grand
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Dan -

I put the assignment back into accepted manually. 

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> On Jun 17, 2021, at 3:44 AM, Dan Romascanu <dromasca@gmail.com> wrote:
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> 
> Hi, 
> 
> Due to a system glitch I cannot enter my reviews via the tool. Until this is fixed, here are my early comments to draft-ietf-6man-grand, which was assigned to me. 
> 
> Version Reviewed - 04
> State: Ready with Editorial Comments
> 
> This is a very well written document. I appreciate the section describing the other Solutions Considered, which is a good guidance and reference for future discussions and extensions. 
> 
> I have two editorial comments only: 
> 
> 1. In Section 3 the Normative Language with capitalizations is used to describe requirements from solutions. This seems quite unnecessary, and certainly cannot be verified for conformance. 
> 2. I would suggest moving or copying the first sentence in Section 6 (that says that all normative text in the memo can be found in this section) in the Introduction section.
> 
> Thanks and regards,
> 
> Dan
> 
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