[Gen-art] Re: Gen-art review of draft-ietf-v6ops-vlan-usage-00.txt
Fred Baker <fred@cisco.com> Tue, 13 December 2005 19:05 UTC
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Cc: gen-art@ietf.org, David Kessens <david.kessens@nokia.com>, Tim Chown <tjc@ecs.soton.ac.uk>
Subject: [Gen-art] Re: Gen-art review of draft-ietf-v6ops-vlan-usage-00.txt
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in my humble opinion, if the authors are OK with the edits, this could go with the document to the RFC Editor. On Dec 13, 2005, at 3:20 PM, Elwyn Davies wrote: > I was selected as General Area Review Team reviewer for this > specification > (for background on Gen-ART, please see > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). > > Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-vlan-usage-00 > Intended Status: Informational > Shepherding AD: David Kessens > Proto shepherd: Fred Baker > Review Trigger: IESG Telechat, 12 December 2005 > > Summary: > This document is essentially ready for Informational. > > There are a couple of editorial nits and I have suggested a small > number of editorial improvements below. > > Editorial: > s1, para 6: s/provided a/provided by a/ > > s1, last para: s/sites who/sites that/ > > s2.2, para 1: I think that 'BSD-based' could be removed - I think > the idea was that a standard PC rather than a dedicated router > could be used but that doesn't really matter here and if not you > ought to expand the acronym BSD. > > s2.2, para 1: The phrase '/64 size links' is a bit colloquial. How > about 'stub links using 64 bit subnet prefixes' > > s2.3, para 2: s/while IPv6/while the IPv6/ > > s2.5: Might be good to remind people that the VLAN tag is 16 bits > so that this can work with a 'usual' maximum 48 bit site prefix > > App A, para 1: s/for BSD/using a computer running the FreeBSD > variant of the Berkeley Software Distribution (BSD) operating > system as a router/ > > App A: In the configuration s/#Router advs/# Router advertisements/ _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
- [Gen-art] Gen-art review of draft-ietf-v6ops-vlan… Elwyn Davies
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-art review of draft-ietf-v6ops-… Elwyn Davies
- [Gen-art] Re: Gen-art review of draft-ietf-v6ops-… Fred Baker