[Gen-art] Gen-art review of draft-ietf-v6ops-vlan-usage-00.txt

I was selected as General Area Review Team reviewer for this specification
(for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-vlan-usage-00
Intended Status: Informational
Shepherding AD: David Kessens
Proto shepherd: Fred Baker
Review Trigger: IESG Telechat, 12 December 2005

Summary:
This document is essentially ready for Informational.

There are a couple of editorial nits and I have suggested a small number of 
editorial improvements below.

Editorial:
s1, para 6: s/provided a/provided by a/

s1, last para: s/sites who/sites that/

s2.2, para 1: I think that 'BSD-based' could be removed - I think the idea 
was that a standard PC rather than a dedicated router could be used but 
that doesn't really matter here and if not you ought to expand the acronym BSD.

s2.2, para 1: The phrase '/64 size links' is a bit colloquial.  
How about 'stub links using 64 bit subnet prefixes'

s2.3, para 2: s/while IPv6/while the IPv6/

s2.5: Might be good to remind people that the VLAN tag is 16 bits so that 
this can work with a 'usual' maximum 48 bit site prefix

App A, para 1: s/for BSD/using a computer running the FreeBSD variant of the 
Berkeley Software Distribution (BSD) operating system as a router/

App A: In the configuration s/#Router advs/# Router advertisements/

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