Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART telechat review of draft-ietf-alto-deployments-15

"Mirja Kuehlewind (IETF)" <ietf@kuehlewind.net> Wed, 29 June 2016 22:23 UTC

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Hi Brian, hi Jari,

I’ve put updating Martin’s affliction incl. email address as well as removing the conclusion already in the RFC editor (in case we don’t do another update before publication).

I note your concerns about the references to individual drafst, however, not sure how this fix this.

Thanks!
Mirja


> Am 30.06.2016 um 00:19 schrieb Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@piuha.net>et>:
> 
> Thanks much, Brian!
> 
> Authors, do note Brian’s comments.
> 
> Jari
> 
> On 24 Jun 2016, at 05:48, Brian E Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> wrote:
> 
>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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>> Document: draft-ietf-alto-deployments-15.txt
>> Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
>> Review Date: 2016-06-13
>> IETF LC End Date: 2016-06-21
>> IESG Telechat date: 2016-06-30
>> 
>> Summary: Ready
>> --------
>> 
>> Comment:
>> --------
>> 
>> This is a long document but well written, so there is little to say about it.
>> 
>> Minor issues:
>> -------------
>> 
>> The Conclusion section could be deleted. It doesn't add anything.
>> 
>> There are a lot of Informational references that are still personal I-Ds. Many of
>> them are not even listed as "Related Internet-Drafts" for the Alto WG. I think readers
>> of the future RFC will find this a bit annoying.
>> 
>> Nits:
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>> 
>> <jan.seedorf@neclab.eu> and <martin.stiemerling@neclab.eu> bounced
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