[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-04

Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Wed, 02 December 2015 23:40 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

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Document: draft-ietf-kitten-cammac-04
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2015-12-02
IETF LC End Date:  2015-12-04 (2nd LC)
IESG Telechat date: 2015-12-17


Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments/nits.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
[Page 3] 2nd and 3rd paragraph: The word "service" is used to designate both the proxy-service and the second backend "application-service" as per [MS-SFU]. This may confuse the reader at first read.
Suggestion would be to use "proxy-service" and "application-service". [Page 8] after point "2." would also benefit from clearer use of these terms.

[Page 8], last paragraph, it was not clear to me if  "service principal" is the "application service"?

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
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