Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04
Robert Moskowitz <rgm@htt-consult.com> Tue, 22 November 2016 05:34 UTC
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To: Gonzalo Camarillo <Gonzalo.Camarillo@ericsson.com>, Tom Henderson <tomhend@u.washington.edu>
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Subject: Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04
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I will start on it Tuesday. Bob On 11/20/2016 03:26 AM, Gonzalo Camarillo wrote: > Hi Tom, > > thanks. Your comments seem to be the only one we got on this draft > during the WGLC. Authors, could you please revise the draft in order to > address these comments? > > Thanks, > > Gonzalo > > On 20/11/2016 4:32 AM, Tom Henderson wrote: >> Gonzalo, I have reviewed HIP DEX again and believe it is ready to >> publish, although I spotted a few minor items below that can be handled >> in the next revision. >> >> - Tom >> >> Editorial/minor: >> >> Section 1: The numbered list is somewhat tersely written and may be >> hard to interpret by the newcomer to HIP specifications. Consider to >> elaborate more (using fuller sentences and not sentence fragments). e.g.: >> >> "Forfeit of Perfect Forward Secrecy with the dropping of an ephemeral >> Diffie-Hellman key agreement." could be >> "Forfeit of the HIPv2 Perfect Forward Secrecy property due to the >> removal of the HIPv2 ephemeral Diffie-Hellman key agreement." >> >> Section 1.1, spell out 'DoS' first time usage >> >> Section 4.1: "Note that x and y each constitute half the final session >> key material." (change to 'half of the') >> >> The figure in 4.1 does not have a caption, and also, why is 'mac' >> lowercased? >> >> Sec 4.1.3.1: "Since only little data is protected by this SA" (perhaps >> s/little/a small amount/) >> >> Sec. 5.2.4: "The following new HIT Suite IDs are defined..." (s/IDs >> are/ID is/ because there is only one defined) >> >> Sec. 6.3: "sort(HIT-I | HIT-R) is defined as the network byte order >> concatenation of the two HITs... comparison of the two HITs interpreted >> as positive (unsigned) 128-bit integers in network byte order" what >> does it mean to define a sort on a network byte order concatenation? It >> seems perhaps clearer to leave endian issues out (they are implicit >> everywhere in a protocol) and just define it as a comparison on HITs >> interpreted as unsigned 128-bit integers (and by the way, is the full >> 128 bits including prefix included or just the 96 bits)? >> >> Sec. 6.5 through 6.8: Unlike much of this draft, these sections do not >> just specifically call out the differences from the corresponding RFC >> 7401 sections, but instead restate the modified processing flow, and it >> is hard to spot what is different here. I wonder whether it would be >> clearer to just refer to those processing steps in RFC 7401 that are >> changed. >> >> Sec. 8: Can a MITM reply to I1 with ICMP parameter problem, causing the >> true response (coming later) to be ignored because the initiator already >> gave up? Maybe clarify here or in sec 5.4 to wait a little while before >> accepting the result of an ICMP. >> >> Sec. 10: Consider to update the IANA section in the style that RFC 8003 >> (and others) used, stating the history of the registry and what exactly >> is requested to be changed. For example, something like "RFC 5201 and >> later RFC 7401 established the following registry .... This document >> defines the following new codepoints for that registry ..." >> > _______________________________________________ > Hipsec mailing list > Hipsec@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/hipsec >
- [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 Gonzalo Camarillo
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 Gonzalo Camarillo
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 Tom Henderson
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 Gonzalo Camarillo
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 Robert Moskowitz
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 Robert Moskowitz
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 Gonzalo Camarillo
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 Gonzalo Camarillo
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 René Hummen
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 Gonzalo Camarillo
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 René Hummen
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 Gonzalo Camarillo
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-dex-04 René Hummen