Re: [ippm] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-ippm-multipoint-alt-mark-07: (with COMMENT)

[Barry Leiba <[e-mail]>]

Thanks for the quick replies, Giuseppe, and thanks for addressing my comments.

Barry

On Tue, Mar 10, 2020 at 10:16 AM Giuseppe Fioccola
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> Dear Barry,
> Thanks for your comment.
> I have included your suggested changes and capitalized “Alternate Marking” through the document.
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> Regarding the first paragraph, I can change "explains" with "applies to". It should be better.
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> Regarding the second paragraph, I can rephrase it as follows: " The Alternate Marking methodology described in RFC 8321 allows the synchronization of the measurements in different points by dividing the packet flow into batches. So it is possible to get coherent counters..."
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> These changes are addressed in my local version.
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> I will upload a new revision as soon as I get the additional ballot positions and comments.
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> Regards,
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> Giuseppe
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> Subject: Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-ippm-multipoint-alt-mark-07: (with COMMENT)
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> Barry Leiba has entered the following ballot position for
> draft-ietf-ippm-multipoint-alt-mark-07: No Objection
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> COMMENT:
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> I found this to be a somewhat difficult read, with some awkward wording.
> Because of time constraints I’ll mostly not comment specifically, but leave it to the RPC.  My comments below on Section 1 are examples.
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> — Abstract —
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>    This document aims to generalize and expand this
>    methodology
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> “This document generalizes and expands this methodology”
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> — Section 1 —
> The “; so” in the first sentence doesn’t follow from what comes before.  It seems that you’ve just glued together two unrelated sentences, and I would unglue them: “point-to-point path.  The extension proposed”
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> How does the extension explain anything?  Isn’t it the document that does the explaining, but then the extension that does the enabling?
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> I can’t parse the first sentence of the second paragraph, and I can’t figure out what you’re trying to say.  Can you try re-writing it?
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> Please check to make sure you are consistent about capitalizing “Alternate Marking” and “Multipoint Alternate Marking” through the document.  It looks like you have it about half and half.
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