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[Modern] Review of draft-ietf-modern-problem-framework-00.txt

Steve Donovan <srdonovan@usdonovans.com> Fri, 24 June 2016 19:21 UTC

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Subject: [Modern] Review of draft-ietf-modern-problem-framework-00.txt
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I have reviewed draft-ietf-modern-problem-framework-00.txt. This 
document is in great shape and I only have editorial comments as follows.

Regards,

Steve

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Section 1:

s /familiar from the /familiar to the/
s/manenr/manner/
s/evolvling/evolving/

Section 2.1
s/assginees/assignees/
s/entitiy/entity/

Section 3
Need references for DRINKS and WEIRDS

Section 4.1.4
s/Aquiring/Acquiring/

Section 4.1.5
s/wtih/with/

Section 4.2.1.2
s/Regisrar/Registrar/

Section 4.1.2.3
s/could could/could/

Section 4.3.2
s/to access to this/to access this/

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