Re: [mpls] I-D Action: draft-ietf-mpls-inband-pm-encapsulation-11.txt

Hi Tianran,

Thanks for the comments.
Please see inline.

Original

From: TianranZhou <zhoutianran=40huawei.com@dmarc.ietf.org>
To: mpls@ietf.org <mpls@ietf.org>;i-d-announce@ietf.org <i-d-announce@ietf.org>;
Cc: Zhukeyi(Kaiyin,Datacom Standard&Patent) <zhukeyi@huawei.com>;
Date: 2024年04月11日 17:44
Subject: Re: [mpls] I-D Action: draft-ietf-mpls-inband-pm-encapsulation-11.txt

Hi,

I find some texts are not clear.
1. In the introduction, paragraph 3 and 4, the use of "former" and "later" are difficult to understand. You may change another way to say.
[XM]>>> To make *the former* and *the later* more clear, some changes are proposed as below.
In paragraph 3, s/the former/the method described in this document, s/the latter/the SFL method.
In paragraph 4, s/the former/the method described in this document, s/the latter/the In-situ OAM method.

2. In section 3, you only mentions "If the edge-to-edge measurement is applied". What about the else? It sounds like, all the following text is about the edge-to-edge. Maybe, you can add something like 

"Otherwise, if the T bit is 0, both transit node and egress node are the processing nodes." 
 [XM]>>> Note that the MPLS ingress node is also a processing node. Propose to change the text as below.
OLD
If the edge-to-edge measurement is applied, i.e., the T bit is set to 1, then only the MPLS egress node [RFC3031] is the processing node.
NEW
If the edge-to-edge measurement is applied, i.e., the T bit is set to 1, then only the MPLS egress node [RFC3031] is the processing node, otherwise all the MPLS nodes along the LSP are the processing nodes.

Cheers,
Xiao Min

Best,

Tianran
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Internet-Draft draft-ietf-mpls-inband-pm-encapsulation-11.txt is now available. It is a work item of the Multiprotocol Label Switching (MPLS) WG of the IETF.

   Title:   Encapsulation For MPLS Performance Measurement with Alternate Marking Method
   Authors: Weiqiang Cheng
            Xiao Min
            Tianran Zhou
            Jinyou Dai
            Yoav Peleg
   Name:    draft-ietf-mpls-inband-pm-encapsulation-11.txt
   Pages:   17
   Dates:   2024-04-09

Abstract:

   This document defines the encapsulation for MPLS performance
   measurement with alternate marking method, which performs flow-based
   packet loss, delay, and jitter measurements on MPLS live traffic.

The IETF datatracker status page for this Internet-Draft is:
https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-mpls-inband-pm-encapsulation/

There is also an HTMLized version available at:
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