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Magnus Westerlund <magnus.westerlund@ericsson.com> Tue, 26 January 2010 08:54 UTC

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Hi,

I have reviewed the GIST state machine document and have the following
comment:

Can't the text version be imporved in relation to the state diagram?
Couldn't the state and the transitions be included in a figure with only
the note numbers on the transitions. Then include the tables below them,
at least making the text version somewhat usable.

As currently written I don't think the document fulfill IETF's rules on
making the text version the authoritative one. As it is very hard to
understand the text version.

Cheers

Magnus Westerlund

IETF Transport Area Director
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