Re: [rtcweb] Preparing for publication request of draft-ietf-rtcweb-use-cases-and-requirements
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Subject: Re: [rtcweb] Preparing for publication request of draft-ietf-rtcweb-use-cases-and-requirements
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Hi, I have not seen any feedback on Mary's review comments. I think these are valid improvements of the document. They do not appear to me to change the meaning of the document, only clarify what is meant. I think the authors should try to incorporate these into the next revision. Cheers Magnus On 2014-01-15 21:57, Mary Barnes wrote: > I had thought I had previously done a detailed review of this doc, but I > can't find it to know whether changes suggested have been incorporated. > So, I have re-reviewed the document and I think it's almost ready to > progress. I think it needs some editorial clarifications and nits to > be fixed as summarized below. Note, I did not review the appendix. > > Regards, > Mary. > > In general, I still find the style of this document very difficult to > grok since the requirements are not grouped in categories and one has to > keep switching back and forth in the document to match requirements to > use cases. > > Questions/Comments for clarification: > ---------------------------------------------------- > 1) Section 1, 1st paragraph, last sentence. It's not clear to me that > "e.g., a telephone" is meaningful. I don't think you're intending to > interworking with a legacy PSTN connected black phone. So, it might be > more accurate to say " e.g., a mobile phone or a SIP UA". > 2) Section 3.3.1.1. Next to last paragraph. I'm not sure what you mean > by different "makes". I think you mean different types of devices > (e.g., mobile, SIP UA, etc. ). That all said, I don't think that's not > so relevant. I think simply stating different OSs and different > browsers is sufficient. > 3) Section 3.3.6.1. It's not at all clear to me why this requirement is > considered specific to WebRTC. I would think the access network changes > should be transparent to WebRTC. Certainly, the device needs to know > what's happening, but I think whether this works is entirely based on > the internals of the device and the specific access network technology, > and not WebRTC application. > 4) Section 3.3.10.1. Why is F24 not considered an additional > requirement here? Also, do you not need to have a statement as to what > other use case is the basis for this one such that the core requirements > are reference? > 5) Section 3.3.11.1, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence. I don't understand > what this is trying to say. What is meant by "enhance > intelligibility"? And, what is meant by "pans the audio from different > participants differently when rendering the audio". > [As an aside, I will note that some of the CLUE use cases likely > encompass what you are trying to communicate here in this requirements > (including subsequent paragraphs and the last "Note:"), so you may want > to look at those and use similar terminology and concepts, that CLUE > spent a lot of time developing. ] > 6) Section 3.4. I would expect F27 to be referenced by at least one of > these use cases. > 7) Section 4.2. > - General: I am a bit confused as there are requirements in this > section that aren't referenced in section 3, including F19, F23, and F27 > . Perhaps, that's because there are some missing references in section > 3 (see item 7)? If not, then why are they there. At a minimum you > should add a sentence to section 4.1 indicating that not all the > requirements are derived from the use cases (contrary to what is > currently stated). > - What's the difference between F24 and F34? > - F30. I had to read this several times to understand it due to > structure. I would suggest changing as follows: > OLD: > > F30 The browser must be able to use the screen (or > a specific area of the screen) or what a certain > application displays on the screen to generate > streams. > > NEW: > > F30 The browser must be able to generate streams using the entire user display, a specific area of the user's display or the information being displayed by a specific application. > > On this one, I also think it would be good to clarify what type of stream - are you talking about using protocol to share content or or is this just a video stream? Or would you have two separate requirement to cover both of these? > > > - F32. I can't quite grok this one. Maybe you are trying to say > something like the following? > OLD: > > F32 There browser must support that STUN and TURN > servers to use are supplied by other entities > than via the web application (i.e. the network > provider). > > NEW: > > F32 The browser must support the use of STUN and TURN > servers that are supplied by entities > other than the web application (i.e. the network > provider). > > > 8) Section 7. I have mixed feelings about leaving this list with URLs > in the document. I think it's good to highlight the use cases that > weren't incorporated and why they weren't. I think it would add a lot > more value to provide a concise summary of the reasons they weren't > added than just including links, in particular, since we usually don't > like to publish RFCs with links. > > > > > Nits: > ------ > 1) Section 1, 1st paragraph, last sentence, "at least one of the > end-user client" -> "at least one of the end-user clients" > 2) Section 3.2, 1st paragraph, 1st sentence: > - "retrives" -> "retrieves" > - add a section reference for "Simple Video Communication Service" > 3) Section 3.2. , next to last sentence. "retrieved from" -> "derived > from" > 4) Section 3.3.5.1, 3rd paragraph, > - 1st sentence. "session" - "session" > - 2nd sentence. "straddle the boundary between the internal network and > external." -> "straddles the boundary between the internal and external > networks. > 5) Section 3.3.5.1, 4th paragraph. "they still want to have the > traffic to stay" -> "they still want the traffic to say" > 6) Section 3.3.61. 1st paragraph. I'm not sure why this ends with ":" > 7) Section 3.3.6.1, 2nd paragraph. "device used by one of the users > have several" -> "device used by one of the users has several" > 8) Section 3.3.11.1, 1st para, 1st sentence. "In this use case is the > Simple..." -> "In this use case, the Simple...." > 9) Section 3.3.11.1 3rd from last paragraph. "use experience" -> "user > experience" > 10) Section 3.4.3.1, 2nd paragraph. "participant send" -> "participant > sends" > 11) Section 4.2: > - F35. "of that streams" -> "that streams" > > > > On Wed, Jan 15, 2014 at 4:44 AM, Magnus Westerlund > <magnus.westerlund@ericsson.com <mailto:magnus.westerlund@ericsson.com>> > wrote: > > WG, > > This is related to: > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-rtcweb-use-cases-and-requirements/ > > We have held WG last call and there has been updates to the document to > resolve the WG last call comments. It is now time to finish up this > document and request publication of it. I am the document shepherd for > this document and will prepare my write-up of the document and in that > process do the necessary reviews. > > I also asked the WG for input on two open issues that needs to be closed > prior to publication request. So please review these and provide your > input on them. > > This is your chance to verify that your comments has been addressed in > the revision. Please provide any feedback on the document within the > next week, i.e. no later than the 22 Feb. > > Note, that I will require that the WG approves of any changes in this > state, rather than any silence is approval model. So if you want some > change to go into the document at this stage there need to (rough) > consensus to introduce it and clearly shown support. > > > Cheers > > Magnus Westerlund > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > Services, Media and Network features, Ericsson Research EAB/TXM > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > Ericsson AB | Phone +46 10 7148287 > <tel:%2B46%2010%207148287> > Färögatan 6 | Mobile +46 73 0949079 > <tel:%2B46%2073%200949079> > SE-164 80 Stockholm, Sweden | mailto: magnus.westerlund@ericsson.com > <mailto:magnus.westerlund@ericsson.com> > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > _______________________________________________ > rtcweb mailing list > rtcweb@ietf.org <mailto:rtcweb@ietf.org> > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/rtcweb > > -- Magnus Westerlund ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Services, Media and Network features, Ericsson Research EAB/TXM ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Ericsson AB | Phone +46 10 7148287 Färögatan 6 | Mobile +46 73 0949079 SE-164 80 Stockholm, Sweden | mailto: magnus.westerlund@ericsson.com ----------------------------------------------------------------------
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