Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir Early review: draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework
Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com> Tue, 31 January 2023 20:42 UTC
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From: Greg Mirsky <gregimirsky@gmail.com>
Date: Tue, 31 Jan 2023 12:42:10 -0800
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To: Tal Mizrahi <tal.mizrahi.phd@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir Early review: draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework
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Hi Tal, many thanks for your thorough review and thoughtful comments. Please find our responses below under the GIM>> tag. Also, the attached diff highlights the proposed updates. Best regards, Greg On Thu, Jan 19, 2023 at 2:32 AM Tal Mizrahi <tal.mizrahi.phd@gmail.com> wrote: > Hello, > > I have been selected to do a routing directorate “early” review of this > draft. > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework/ > > The routing directorate will, on request from the working group chair, > perform an “early” review of a draft before it is submitted for > publication to the IESG. The early review can be performed at any time > during the draft’s lifetime as a working group document. The purpose > of the early review depends on the stage that the document has > reached. > > For more information about the Routing Directorate, please see > http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir > > Document: draft-ietf-detnet-oam-framework-07 > Reviewer: Tal Mizrahi > Review Date: January 19th, 2023 > Intended Status: Informational > > Summary: > This document is basically ready for publication, but has nits that > should be considered prior to being submitted to the IESG. > > Comments: > > The document summarizes the OAM requirements of DetNet networks. The > document provides a good background of the necessary OAM components > and presents the requirements of the OAM solutions. > > Issues: > > - It would be helpful if the abstract would say that the target > > audience of this document is the DetNet working group members, and is > > intended to be used as a set of requirements for future work in the > > DetNet working group. > > GIM>> Thank you for the suggestion. Would adding the following sentence be >> helpful? > > NEW TEXT: > > The document will > > be used in future work that defines the applicability of and extension > > of OAM protocols for a deterministic network. > > >> - Section 3 - Operation: > > - For each of the sections 3.2-3.7 it would be helpful if you could > > specify how PREOF affects each of these functions. For example, > > continuity checking: what happens if MEP A and MEP B are two PREOF > > endpoints - is continuity checking performed individually for each of > > the PREOF paths, or is PREOF transparent to the CC? > > GIM>> Thank you for your thoughtful suggestion. We've added notes in >> Sections 3.2 and 3.3. As CC and CV are used in DetNet forwarding sub-layer, >> PREOF does not affect them. Section 3.4 notes that route tracing, i.e., >> ping and traceroute, can be used to discover PREOF capabilities. Other >> sections added text referencing CC, CV, and ping/traceroute. Do these >> changes clearly describe the interaction between PREOF and OAM? > > - "information is collected and sent using the DetNet Controller > > Plane" - isn't it collected by the management plane? It may be worth > > clarifying in the document the exact breakdown between the management > > plane and the controller plane in the context of this document. > > GIM>> Section 4.4.2 of RFC 8655 defines the DetNet Controller Plane as the >> aggregation of Management and Control Planes. Thus, based on the >> interpretation of the DetNet Controller Plane, the management plane plays >> the essential role in collecting OAM information. > > >> - Section 8 - Security Considerations: > > You may want to mention that specifically, the security > > considerations of OAM in the context of DetNet are discussed in > > Section 9 of [RFC 9055]. > > GIM>> Thank you for the suggestion. Done. > > >> Nits: > > GIM>> Thank you for your careful review and pointing out these nits. Fixed >> them all. Please see in the attached diff. > > - Section 2.1 [RFC8655] ==> Section 2.1 of [RFC8655] > > - Maintenance Intermediate endPoint (MIP) ==> [according to IEEE > > 802.1] Maintenance Intermediate Point (MIP) > > - In-band OAM is an active OAM is considered ==> In-band OAM is an > > active OAM considered > > - therefore, PM is a key topic ==> please add "PM" to the acronym list > > GIM>> Done > - DetNet service sub-layer functions using a sequence number. ==> > > DetNet service sub-layer functions use sequence numbers for PREOF. > > GIM>> Agree, thank you. > - Control Plane / Controller Plane - please be consistent, or clarify > > the difference between the two terms. > > GIM>> As noted above, the DetNet Controller Plane is viewed as the >> aggregation of the management and control planes. The reference to the >> control plane is specific to the use of the distributed control model. > > - perfromence metris ==> performance metrics - systemto ==> system to GIM>> Done and done. - downstream MEP ==> the term is used without definition GIM>> Updated text as follows: 1. It MUST be possible to initiate a DetNet OAM session from a MEP located at a DetNet node towards MEP(s) downstream from that DetNet node within the given domain at a particular DetNet sub- layer.
- [RTG-DIR] RtgDir Early review: draft-ietf-detnet-… Tal Mizrahi
- Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir Early review: draft-ietf-det… Greg Mirsky
- Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir Early review: draft-ietf-det… Tal Mizrahi
- Re: [RTG-DIR] RtgDir Early review: draft-ietf-det… Greg Mirsky