Re: [Softwires] WGLC for draft-ietf-softwire-yang-04 as Standard Track, closed by 27 June 2018

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Hi Ian,

Works for me. Thanks.

Cheers,
Med

De : [e-mail] [mailto:[e-mail]]
Envoyé : vendredi 29 juin 2018 09:59
À : BOUCADAIR Mohamed IMT/OLN; Sheng Jiang
Cc : Softwires WG; [e-mail]; Andy Wingo
Objet : Re: [Softwires] WGLC for draft-ietf-softwire-yang-04 as Standard Track, closed by 27 June 2018

Hi Sheng /Med,

@Sheng, Thanks for the review.
@Med, Thanks for the quick update.

A couple of other things:

There’s an outstanding comment on model element descriptions given as “…”. Proposed new text:

notification softwire-binding-instance-event description: "The ID of the binding-instance that generated the notification.";

leaf-list modified-entry description "The ID of the the binding-table entry that has been modified.";

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I just did a quick read through of -05. There are a few small language cleanups that I would like to make:

Section 2.1
s/Provides configuration and monitoring for softwire CE element/Provides configuration and monitoring for the softwire CE element/

s/Provides configuration and monitoring for softwire BR element/Provides configuration and monitoring for the softwire BR element/

Section 2.2
s/be imported here, as needed/be imported, as needed/

ietf-softwire-ce:binding-entry/br-ipv6-addr
description
s/The IPv6 address for of the binding BR./The IPv6 address for the binding BR./

ietf-softwire-br:br-instances/algorithm
description
s/Indicate that the instance supports the MAP-E and MAP-T functions./Indicate that the instance supports the MAP-E and MAP-T functions./

If there’s no objection to the above changes, I’ll update and post later on today.

Cheers,
Ian


On 27. Jun 2018, at 10:54, [e-mail]<mailto:[e-mail]> wrote:

Hi Sheng,

Many thanks for the careful review.

An updated version which integrates your comments is available online:https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-softwire-yang/?include_text=1

See more inline.

Cheers,
Med