[Softwires] draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-deployment

Nejc Škoberne <nejc@skoberne.net> Mon, 14 November 2011 21:15 UTC

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Dear authors,

I volunteered yesterday at the Softwires IETF 82 meeting to be one of 
the reviewers of your draft. I reviewed it and I am sending the link 
to the PDF which includes all the proposed changes and my comments. I
also tried to address some typos and grammar mistakes, but I since I
am not a native speaker, some of those fixes could be wrong too.

I hope you don't mind the PDF format of the review, it just seemed to
be the easiest way for me to do this.

http://nejc.skoberne.net/transfer/dslite-deployment-comments.pdf
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/1104483/dslite-deployment-comments.pdf (backup link)

Regards,
Nejc