[tcpm] Genart last call partial review of draft-ietf-tcpm-rfc793bis-24

Francis Dupont via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Thu, 19 August 2021 16:00 UTC

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Review is partially done. Another assignment may be needed to complete it.

Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-rfc793bis-24
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2021-08-18
IETF LC End Date: 2021-08-02
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Ready with Nits

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

 Only editorial comments: there are a lot of inconsistencies on US/UK spelling
 for instance acknowledgment vs acknowledgement, or e.g., vs e.g.. These should
 be addressed by the RFC Ediror. Note there is an i.e, (vs correct i.e.,) in page 47.

 I did not fully verify the technical details mainly because I review I-Ds in
 public transports so without the whole collection of merged RFCs and errata.
 In fact I only checked the figure 5 section 3.3.2 page 17 because an arrow
 missed from it in the original RFC: this is addressed by the note 2 (I
 compared with the fixed state transition diagram of the TCP/IP Illustrated
 volume 2).

There is a small note for the IESG in section 5 page 92 in the very last
paragraph about a PERPASS/privacy review.