[Tools-team] Language review of draft-ietf-tools-draft-submission-08
Henrik Levkowetz <henrik@levkowetz.com> Mon, 18 April 2005 23:17 UTC
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Subject: [Tools-team] Language review of draft-ietf-tools-draft-submission-08
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Hi Alex,
Ok, so I've completed the language review and added some 'the',
'a' and made similar changes; and also provisionally incorporated
the clarification I proposed earlier in a separate mail.
Clarification is still needed, I think, for the other issue I brought
up. Enclosed is the revised .xml source, and the resulting .txt file.
A diff between this and your latest version is available here:
http://ietf.levkowetz.com/drafts/tools/draft-submission/draft-ietf-tools-draft-submission-08.c-from-08.b.diff.html
Would you check my changes, and submit this version (assuming you
agree to the changes, of course) once you've fixed the one
remaining unclear formulation?
Regards,
Henrik
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