[Uta] Barry Leiba's Yes on draft-ietf-uta-email-tls-certs-07: (with COMMENT)
"Barry Leiba" <barryleiba@computer.org> Wed, 16 December 2015 14:58 UTC
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Subject: [Uta] Barry Leiba's Yes on draft-ietf-uta-email-tls-certs-07: (with COMMENT)
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Barry Leiba has entered the following ballot position for draft-ietf-uta-email-tls-certs-07: Yes When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this introductory paragraph, however.) Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/iesg/statement/discuss-criteria.html for more information about IESG DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-uta-email-tls-certs/ ---------------------------------------------------------------------- COMMENT: ---------------------------------------------------------------------- In the Introduction, you say that ths document replaces Section 2.4 of RFC 2595. It appears that it's specifically Section 3 that replaces that section. Maybe it's best to say that? -- Section 2 -- reference identifier: (as defined in [RFC6125]) One of the domain names associated by the email (i.e., an SMTP, IMAP, POP3 or ManageSieve) client with the target email server and optionally an application service type for performing name checks on the server certificate. 1. You refer to the definition in 6125 as though you're repeating it here, but you're not: you're giving a different definition. Maybe if you said "formally defined in RFC 6125" instead, it'd be clearer that this explanation is applying that formal definition to this specific situation (email). 2. It's usually bad to put a parenthesized explanation in the middle of a unit, and "email client" is a unit here. (And, as almost always, I think "i.e." is unnecessary and further distracting.) 3. The sentence is long and awkward, saying "associated by... with... and optionally...," and it's easy to get lost. Here's a suggestion: NEW reference identifier: (formally defined in [RFC6125]) One of the domain names that the email client (SMTP, IMAP, POP3 or ManageSieve) associates with the target email server. The identifier can also include an application service type for performing name checks on the server certificate. END