Re: [xrblock] Unclear paragraph in draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-discard-13

Thanks for your quick response, Qin. I have just requested an IETF LC
for this draft.

Cheers,

Gonzalo

On 20/05/2013 9:20 AM, Qin Wu wrote:
> Hi, Gonzalo:
> Your proposed change looks good to me, I will implement this change into this draft.
> Thanks.
> 
> Regards!
> -Qin
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Gonzalo Camarillo [mailto:Gonzalo.Camarillo@ericsson.com] 
> Sent: Monday, May 20, 2013 1:55 PM
> To: Qin Wu
> Cc: xrblock@ietf.org; Glen Zorn
> Subject: Re: [xrblock] Unclear paragraph in draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-discard-13
> 
> Hi Qin,
> 
> thanks for the clarification. Additionally, I would fix the language of
> that paragraph (prepositions, articles, verbs, typos, ...). Something
> along these lines:
> 
>    When a Discard Count Metrics Block is sent together with a Burst Gap
>    Discard Metrics Block (defined in [BGDISCARD]) to the media sender or
>    RTP based network management system, the information carried in the
>    Discard Count Metrics Block and the Burst Gap Discard Metrics Block
>    allows systems receiving the blocks to calculate burst gap
>    summary statistics (e.g., the gap discard rate).
> 
> Feel free to edit the text if there is something you do not like.
> 
> Cheers,
> 
> Gonzalo
> 
> On 20/05/2013 4:15 AM, Qin Wu wrote:
>> One small change to the proposed text:
>> s/systems receiving the report/systems receiving the blocks
>>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: Qin Wu 
>> Sent: Monday, May 20, 2013 9:03 AM
>> To: 'Gonzalo Camarillo'; xrblock@ietf.org
>> Cc: 'Glen Zorn'
>> Subject: RE: [xrblock] Unclear paragraph in draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-discard-13
>>
>> Hi, Gonzalo:
>> We believe you are referring to "them" in this paragraph not clear.
>> "them" is corresponding to "media sender or RTP based network management system"
>> in this paragraph.
>> So how about the following change:
>> OLD TEXT:
>> "
>>    In case of Discard Count Metrics Block sent together with Burst Gap
>>    Discard Metrics Block defined in [BGDISCARD] to the media sender or
>>    RTP based network management system, information carried in the
>>    Discard Count Metrics Block and Burst Gap Discard Metrics Block
>>    allows them calculate the some bust gap summary statistics, e.g., gap
>>    discard rate.
>> "
>> NEW TEXT:
>> "
>>    In case of Discard Count Metrics Block sent together with Burst Gap
>>    Discard Metrics Block defined in [BGDISCARD] to the media sender or
>>    RTP based network management system, information carried in the
>>    Discard Count Metrics Block and Burst Gap Discard Metrics Block
>>    allows systems receiving the report to calculate the some bust gap 
>>    summary statistics, e.g., gap discard rate.
>> "
>> Hope this clarifies.
>>
>> Regards!
>> -Qin & Glen
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: xrblock-bounces@ietf.org [mailto:xrblock-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of Gonzalo Camarillo
>> Sent: Friday, May 17, 2013 7:36 PM
>> To: xrblock@ietf.org
>> Subject: [xrblock] Unclear paragraph in draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-discard-13
>>
>> Hi,
>>
>> the following paragraph, in draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-discard-13, is a
>> bit unclear:
>>
>>    In case of Discard Count Metrics Block sent together with Burst Gap
>>    Discard Metrics Block defined in [BGDISCARD] to the media sender or
>>    RTP based network management system, information carried in the
>>    Discard Count Metrics Block and Burst Gap Discard Metrics Block
>>    allows them calculate the some bust gap summary statistics, e.g., gap
>>    discard rate.
>>
>> Authors, could you please fix it (i.e., clarify it) so that I can
>> initiate an IETF LC on this draft?
>>
>> Thanks,
>>
>> Gonzalo
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