Re: [6lowpan] Working-Group Last Call for draft-ietf-6lowpan-usecases-06

[Geoff Mulligan <[e-mail]>]

Eunah,
  Thanks for taking care of these editorial comments.

The document is certainly nearly ready to go to the IESG and the
shepherd document is complete.  There are a couple of "nits" that need
to be addressed before I can send it to our ADs. Enuah, I will send you
the list of "nits" in my next message.

Additionally, I was informed last night (thanks Jonathan and Pete) that
I had not answered a number of messages from JP about this document.  It
would appear that in my move to use Google to filter my email, it
(Google) decided to categorize all of JP's messages to me as SPAM - I
think that I've corrected that situation.  This message should answer
JP's questions regarding the status of the document.  In the future,
remember that there are two WG Chairs, if for some reason I'm not
responding to a message.

	geoff

On Mon, 2010-11-08 at 20:56 +0100, Eunsook "Eunah" Kim wrote:
> Dear Paul,
> 
> First of all, I'm very sorry for the late responding.
> I highly appreciate on your detail comments.
> I just uploaded the new version fixing the editorial errors you commented.
> You will find the new version at
> http://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-6lowpan-usecases/
> 
> Thanks again for the valuable review.
> 
> Best Regards,
> Eunah
> 
> 
> On Tue, Aug 10, 2010 at 12:11 AM, Paul Chilton <[e-mail]> wrote:
> > I think the draft is well written and contains valuable information.  It
> > should be submitted to the IESG after the following editorial changes are
> > made:
> >
> > Nits
> > P1, L24 r/characterisitcis/characteristics
> > P1, L24 r/dimention/dimension
> > P4, L24 "...details of the each..." - remove "each"
> > P4, L35 r/arbitary/arbitrary
> > P9, L30 r/boold/blood
> > P10, L30 "In case that..." - replace with "In the case that..."
> > P10, L39 "In Mesh Under, more than one LMs  are selected for multi-hop
> > transmission and the nodes MAY also play role in transmission multi-point
> > traffic (multicast) by unicast method, not only role in data collection."
> > Sentence is unclear
> > P11, L7 "The data volume is usually not so big in this case, but data is
> > sensitive for delay." replace with "The volume of data volume is usually not
> > large in this case, but is sensitive to delay."
> > P11, L23 "In case..." replace with "In the case..."
> > P11, L25 r/typle/type
> > P12, L25 "such as fire alarm" add "such as a fire alarm"
> > P12, L25 "...MUST be handled in very critical manner." replace with "...MUST
> > be handled in a very critical manner. "
> > P12, L38 "...do not move..."  replace with "...are immobile..."
> > P13, L50 r/acheived/achieved
> > P15, L31 remove "...of the Grid network..."
> > P15, L46 "...a few dozen of nodes..." remove "of"
> > P16, L52 "...LBR provides connectivities to the outside of LoWPAN..."
> > replace with "...LBR  provides connectivity to the outside world..."
> > P17, L37 r/LoPWAN/LoWPAN
> > P21, L52 r/failure/fails
> > Regards
> > Paul
> >
> > Paul Chilton
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> > ____________________________________________
> >
> >
> > Carsten Bormann wrote:
> >
> > LoWPANners,
> > as you know, the working group chairs dropped the ball on the usecases
> > document.
> > A version with fixes resulting from the WGLC issued on 2009-01-09 was
> > submitted on 2009-10-02. We wanted to get some quick feedback on
> > whether that was fixing the issues and then never actually issued the
> > second working-group last call.  Indeed, the Internet-Draft expired
> > after six months...  Then the terminology of the ND draft changed.
> > Since the usecases draft now has been resubmitted with updated
> > terminology:
> > This is a Working-Group Last-Call for:
> > http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-6lowpan-usecases-06
> > The document is intended to be submitted by this Working Group to the
> > IESG for publication as an Informational Document.
> > This is a one-week Working-Group Last-Call, ending on 2010-08-09
> > (Monday, August 09, 2010) at 2359 UTC.
> > Please review the document carefully (one last time), and send your
> > comments to the 6lowpan list.  Please also indicate in your response
> > whether or not you think this document is ready to go to the IESG.
> > Carsten and Geoff
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