Re: [6lowpan] Working-Group Last Call for draft-ietf-6lowpan-usecases-06

["Eunsook \"Eunah\" Kim" <[e-mail]>]

Dear Paul,

First of all, I'm very sorry for the late responding.
I highly appreciate on your detail comments.
I just uploaded the new version fixing the editorial errors you commented.
You will find the new version at
http://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-6lowpan-usecases/

Thanks again for the valuable review.

Best Regards,
Eunah


On Tue, Aug 10, 2010 at 12:11 AM, Paul Chilton <[e-mail]> wrote:
> I think the draft is well written and contains valuable information.  It
> should be submitted to the IESG after the following editorial changes are
> made:
>
> Nits
> P1, L24 r/characterisitcis/characteristics
> P1, L24 r/dimention/dimension
> P4, L24 "...details of the each..." - remove "each"
> P4, L35 r/arbitary/arbitrary
> P9, L30 r/boold/blood
> P10, L30 "In case that..." - replace with "In the case that..."
> P10, L39 "In Mesh Under, more than one LMs  are selected for multi-hop
> transmission and the nodes MAY also play role in transmission multi-point
> traffic (multicast) by unicast method, not only role in data collection."
> Sentence is unclear
> P11, L7 "The data volume is usually not so big in this case, but data is
> sensitive for delay." replace with "The volume of data volume is usually not
> large in this case, but is sensitive to delay."
> P11, L23 "In case..." replace with "In the case..."
> P11, L25 r/typle/type
> P12, L25 "such as fire alarm" add "such as a fire alarm"
> P12, L25 "...MUST be handled in very critical manner." replace with "...MUST
> be handled in a very critical manner. "
> P12, L38 "...do not move..."  replace with "...are immobile..."
> P13, L50 r/acheived/achieved
> P15, L31 remove "...of the Grid network..."
> P15, L46 "...a few dozen of nodes..." remove "of"
> P16, L52 "...LBR provides connectivities to the outside of LoWPAN..."
> replace with "...LBR  provides connectivity to the outside world..."
> P17, L37 r/LoPWAN/LoWPAN
> P21, L52 r/failure/fails
> Regards
> Paul
>
> Paul Chilton
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>
> Carsten Bormann wrote:
>
> LoWPANners,
> as you know, the working group chairs dropped the ball on the usecases
> document.
> A version with fixes resulting from the WGLC issued on 2009-01-09 was
> submitted on 2009-10-02. We wanted to get some quick feedback on
> whether that was fixing the issues and then never actually issued the
> second working-group last call.  Indeed, the Internet-Draft expired
> after six months...  Then the terminology of the ND draft changed.
> Since the usecases draft now has been resubmitted with updated
> terminology:
> This is a Working-Group Last-Call for:
> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-6lowpan-usecases-06
> The document is intended to be submitted by this Working Group to the
> IESG for publication as an Informational Document.
> This is a one-week Working-Group Last-Call, ending on 2010-08-09
> (Monday, August 09, 2010) at 2359 UTC.
> Please review the document carefully (one last time), and send your
> comments to the 6lowpan list.  Please also indicate in your response
> whether or not you think this document is ready to go to the IESG.
> Carsten and Geoff
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