Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9302 <draft-ietf-lisp-6834bis-14> for your review

[Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]>]

Hi Luigi, Olivier, and Damien,

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> On Sep 14, 2022, at 3:18 AM, dsaucez <[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
> Hello,
> 
> I am ok with the suggestions as well.
> 
> Thank you,
> 
> Damien Saucez 
> 
>> On 14 Sep 2022, at 10:44, Olivier Bonaventure <[e-mail]> wrote:
>> 
>> Same for me, I agree with your changes and Luigi’s comments.
>> 
>> Best regards,
>> 
>> 
>> Olivier Bonaventure
>> 
>> ________________________________________
>> From: Luigi IANNONE <[e-mail]>
>> Sent: Wednesday, September 14, 2022 8:51 AM
>> To: Alanna Paloma
>> Cc: [e-mail]; Damien Saucez; Olivier Bonaventure; [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail]
>> Subject: RE: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9302 <draft-ietf-lisp-6834bis-14> for your review
>> 
>> Hi,
>> 
>> I had a look at the latest diff and it looks all good to me.
>> 
>> Thanks for your work.
>> 
>> Ciao
>> 
>> L.
>> 
>> 
>>> -----Original Message-----
>>> From: Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]>
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>>> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9302 <draft-ietf-lisp-6834bis-14> for your
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>>> Hi Luigi,
>>> 
>>> Thank you for your reply.  We have updated as requested.
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>>>> On Sep 13, 2022, at 4:24 AM, Luigi IANNONE
>>> <luigi.iannone=[e-mail]> wrote:
>>>> 
>>>> Hi,
>>>> 
>>>> Thank you very much for this review,
>>>> See comments inline.
>>>> 
>>>> 
>>>>> -----Original Message-----
>>>>> From: [e-mail] <[e-mail]>
>>>>> Sent: Tuesday, 13 September 2022 06:37
>>>>> To: Luigi IANNONE <[e-mail]>;
>>> [e-mail];
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>>>>> Subject: Re: AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9302 <draft-ietf-lisp-6834bis-14> for
>>>>> your review
>>>>> 
>>>>> Authors,
>>>>> 
>>>>> While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as
>>>>> necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file.
>>>>> 
>>>>> 1) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear
>>>>> in the
>>>>> title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. -->
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 2) <!-- [rfced] RFC 6834 says the following:
>>>>> 
>>>>> It is not meant to replace any
>>>>> existing LISP mechanisms but rather to extend them by providing new
>>>>> functionalities.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Should this text indicate that it updates the extensions or
>>>>> functionalities, rather than the mechanisms?
>>>> 
>>>> Can be simplified to:
>>>> 
>>>> It is not meant to replace any existing LISP mechanism, rather providing
>>> new functionalities.
>>>> 
>>>> Better?
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> This document obsoletes RFC 6834 "Locator/ID Separation Protocol
>>>>> (LISP) Map-Versioning", which is the initial experimental
>>>>> specifications of the mechanisms updated by this document.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> This document obsoletes [RFC6834], which is the initial experimental
>>>>> specifications of the mechanisms updated by this document.
>>>>> -->
>>>> I guess the second is actually new text, which reads better.
>>>> 
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 3) <!-- [rfced]  In the following, to what does "it" and "both" refer?
>>>>> Is it "Map-Versioning" or "the information"?  Because there are two
>>>>> uses and the text refers to "both cases", we suggest using updating
>>>>> this text to clearly separate the uses (e.g., perhaps use <ol> or <ul>).
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> When Map-Versioning is used, LISP-encapsulated data packets contain
>>>>> the version number of the two mappings used to select the RLOCs in
>>>>> the outer header (i.e., both source and destination RLOCs).  This
>>>>> information has two uses.  On the one hand, it enables the ETR
>>>>> (Egress Tunnel Router) receiving the packet to know if the ITR
>>>>> (Ingress Tunnel Router) is using the latest mapping version for the
>>>>> destination EID.  If this is not the case, the ETR can directly send
>>>>> a Map-Request containing the updated mapping to the ITR, to notify it
>>>>> of the latest version.  The ETR can also solicit the ITR to trigger a
>>>>> Map-Request to obtain the latest mapping by sending it a Solicit Map-
>>>>> Request (SMR) message.  Both cases are defined in
>>>>> [I-D.ietf-lisp-rfc6833bis].  On the other hand, it enables an ETR
>>>>> receiving such a packet to know if it has in its EID-to-RLOC Map-
>>>>> Cache the latest mapping for the source EID.  If this is not the
>>>>> case, a Map-Request can be sent.
>>>>> -->
>>>> 
>>>> New suggested text:
>>>> 
>>>>  When Map-Versioning is used, LISP-encapsulated data packets contain
>>>>  the version number of the two mappings used to select the RLOCs in
>>>>  the outer header (i.e., both source and destination RLOCs).  This
>>>>  information has two uses:
>>>> 
>>>>  1. Map-Versioning enables the ETR  (Egress Tunnel Router) receiving
>>>>      the packet to know if the ITR (Ingress Tunnel Router) is using the latest
>>>>      mapping version for the destination EID.  If this is not the case, the ETR
>>>>      can directly send a Map-Request containing the updated mapping to
>>>>      the ITR, to notify it of the latest version.  The ETR can also solicit the
>>>>      ITR to trigger a Map-Request to obtain the latest mapping by sending
>>>>      a Solicit Map- Request (SMR) message.  Both options are defined in
>>>>      [I-D.ietf-lisp-rfc6833bis].
>>>> 
>>>> 2. Map-Versioning enables an ETR  receiving the packet to know if it
>>>>     has in its EID-to-RLOC Map-Cache the latest mapping for the
>>>>     source EID.  If this is not the case, a Map-Request can be sent.
>>>> 
>>>> Better?
>>>> 
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 4) <!--[rfced] May we update instances of "Dest Map-Version number"
>>>>> to "Destination Map-Version number" to reflect usage in RFC 6834?
>>>>> Note that this document has 2 instances of "Destination Map-Version
>>>>> number" and 14 instances of "Dest Map-Version number".
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> Dest Map-Version number:  Map-Version of the mapping in the EID-to-
>>>>>   RLOC Map-Cache used by the ITR to select the RLOC present in the
>>>>>   "Destination Routing Locator" field of the outer IP header of LISP-
>>>>>   encapsulated packets (Section 7.1).
>>>>> -->
>>>>> 
>>>> 
>>>> Actually should be the other way around, changing the two instances of
>>> "Destination Map-Version Number: to "Dest Map-Version Number". The use
>>> of "Dest Map-Version Number" has been chosen to be inline with the figure
>>> 1 throughout the document.
>>>> 
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 5) <!-- [rfced] For clarity, may we update this text as follows?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> The ordering enables reacting differently to
>>>>> "older" and "newer" Map-Version number, discarding the packet in the
>>>>> former case and triggering a Map-Request in the latter (see Section 7
>>>>> for further details).
>>>>> 
>>>>> Perhaps:
>>>>> The ordering enables different reactions to
>>>>> "older" and "newer" Map-Version numbers, whereby "older" numbers
>>> are
>>>>> discarded and "newer" numbers trigger Map-Requests (see Section 7
>>>>> for further details).
>>>>> -->
>>>> 
>>>> Yes. It reads better.
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 6) <!-- [rfced] Do you want to use superscript (<sup>) here?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>>      V2 > V1 AND (V2 - V1) <= 2**(12-1)
>>>>> 
>>>>>       OR
>>>>> 
>>>>>       V1 > V2 AND (V1 - V2) > 2**(12-1)
>>>>> 
>>>>> <sup> would display as follows in the text:
>>>>>       V2 > V1 AND (V2 - V1) <= 2^(12-1)
>>>>> 
>>>>>       OR
>>>>> 
>>>>>       V1 > V2 AND (V1 - V2) > 2^(12-1)
>>>>> 
>>>>> (12-1) would display as superscript in HTML and PDF.
>>>>> -->
>>>> 
>>>> Yes, good idea.
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 7) <!-- [rfced] Is it the LISP site that assigns a new Map-Version number?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> The main idea of using Map-Version numbers is that whenever there is
>>>>> a change in the mapping (e.g., adding/removing RLOCs, a change in the
>>>>> weights due to Traffic Engineering policies, or a change in the
>>>>> priorities) or a LISP site realizes that one or more of its own RLOCs
>>>>> are not reachable anymore from a local perspective (e.g., through
>>>>> IGP, or policy changes) the LISP site updates the mapping, also
>>>>> assigning a new Map-Version number.
>>>>> 
>>>>> Perhaps:
>>>>> The main idea of using Map-Version numbers is that whenever there is
>>>>> a change in the mapping (e.g., adding/removing RLOCs, a change in the
>>>>> weights due to Traffic Engineering policies, or a change in the
>>>>> priorities) or a LISP site realizes that one or more of its own RLOCs
>>>>> are no longer reachable from a local perspective (e.g., through IGP
>>>>> or policy changes), the LISP site updates the mapping and also assigns
>>>>> a new Map-Version number.
>>>>> -->
>>>> 
>>>> The suggested text is OK.
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 8) <!-- [rfced] Is mapping intended to be singular or plural here?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> To this end simple measures can be
>>>>> taken, like updating a mapping only when all active traffic is using
>>>>> the latest version, or waiting sufficient time to be sure that
>>>>> mapping in LISP caches expire, which means waiting at least as much
>>>>> as the mapping Time-To-Live (as defined in
>>>>> [I-D.ietf-lisp-rfc6833bis]).
>>>>> 
>>>>> Perhaps:
>>>>> To this end, simple measures can be taken, like
>>>>> updating a mapping only when all active traffic is using the latest
>>>>> version, or waiting a sufficient amount of time to be sure that the
>>>>> mapping in LISP caches expires, which means waiting at least as long
>>>>> as the mapping Time To Live (TTL) (as defined in [RFC9301]).
>>>>> -->
>>>> 
>>>> Singular is correct.
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 9) <!-- [rfced] We are having trouble parsing this sentence.  Should
>>>>> the second instance of "ignoring the Source Map-Version number" be
>>> deleted?
>>>>> 
>>>>> Original:
>>>>> The ETR checks only the Dest Map-Version number, ignoring the Source
>>>>> Map-Version number as specified in the final sentence of Section 7.2,
>>>>> ignoring the Source Map-Version number.
>>>>> -->
>>>> 
>>>> Yes, delete the second instance.
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 10) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of
>>>>> the online Style Guide <https://www.rfc-
>>>>> editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>
>>>>> and let us know if any changes are needed. Note that our script did
>>>>> not flag any words in particular, but this should still be reviewed as a best
>>> practice.
>>>>> -->
>>>> 
>>>> Nothing to change IMO.
>>>> 
>>>> Thanks
>>>> 
>>>> Ciao
>>>> 
>>>> L.
>>>> 
>>>> 
>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> Thank you.
>>>>> 
>>>>> RFC Editor
>>>>> 
>>>>> 
>>>>> On Sep 12, 2022, at 9:33 PM, [e-mail] wrote:
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>>>>> --------------------------------------
>>>>> RFC9302 (draft-ietf-lisp-6834bis-14)
>>>>> 
>>>>> Title            : Locator/ID Separation Protocol (LISP) Map-Versioning
>>>>> Author(s)        : L. Iannone, D. Saucez, O. Bonaventure
>>>>> WG Chair(s)      : Joel M. Halpern, Luigi Iannone
>>>>> Area Director(s) : Alvaro Retana, John Scudder, Andrew Alston
>> 
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