Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9365 <draft-ietf-ipwave-vehicular-networking-30> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9365 <draft-ietf-ipwave-vehicular-networking-30> for your review
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Hi Alice, I need more time to proofread the revision. Could you allow me more time to let me proofread it by the midnight on February 25 in KST? I was busy with university work and event today. Thanks. Best Regards, Paul 2023년 2월 24일 (금) 오전 1:39, Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong <jaehoon.paul@gmail.com>님이 작성: > Hi Alice, > Thanks for your quick update. > I answer your comments inline below with the prefix "=> [PAUL]". > > On Thu, Feb 23, 2023 at 1:49 PM Alice Russo <arusso@amsl.com> wrote: > >> Paul, >> >> Thank you for your reply. We have updated the document accordingly; >> please see the follow-up question below. The revised files are here (please >> refresh): >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9365.html >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9365.txt >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9365.pdf >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9365.xml >> >> This diff file shows all changes from the approved I-D: >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9365-diff.html >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9365-rfcdiff.html (side by side) >> >> This diff file shows the changes made during AUTH48 thus far: >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9365-auth48diff.html >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9365-auth48rfcdiff.html (side by >> side) >> >> >> For #14, regarding this sentence in Section 5, may it be updated as below >> for readability? >> >> > Original: >> > This relative speed leads the half of the link lifetime between the >> > vehicle and the IP-RSU. >> >> >> Your reply: >> This relative speed leads to the half of the lifetime of the wireless >> link >> between the vehicle and the IP-RSU. >> >> Perhaps: >> This relative speed causes the lifetime of the wireless link >> between the vehicle and the IP-RSU to be halved. >> >> => [PAUL] The above Perhaps looks good to me. > >> >> FYI, regarding the requested updates for the references: >> - Using the organization element is the preferred syntax when an >> organization authored a document, so those changes have not been made. >> - Several updates to add volume and issue numbers were already made in >> the edited document. >> - A "web access date" is not included in references within RFCs. >> >> => [PAUL] The above policy looks good to me, but there are many places > to fix in References: > Could you update the references with the following ones? > > - OLD: > [DFC] > Jeong, J., Shen, Y., Kim, S., Choe, D., Lee, K., and Y. Kim, "DFC: > Device-free human counting through WiFi fine-grained subcarrier > information", IET Communications, Volume 15, Issue 3, pp. 337-350, DOI > 10.1049/cmu2.12043, January 2021, <https://doi.org/10.1049/cmu2.12043>. > > - NEW: > [DFC] > Jeong, J., Shen, Y., Kim, S., Choe, D., Lee, K., and Y. Kim, "DFC: > Device-free human counting through WiFi fine-grained subcarrier > information", IET Communications, Volume 15, Issue 3, pp. 337-350, DOI > 10.1049/cmu2.12043, February 2021, <https://doi.org/10.1049/cmu2.12043>. > --- > > - OLD: > [FirstNet] > "FirstNet Authority: The future of public safety communications", < > https://www.firstnet.gov/>. > > - NEW: > [FirstNet] > FirstNet Authority, "The future of public safety communications", < > https://www.firstnet.gov/>. > --- > > - OLD: > [OMNI] > Templin, F. L., Ed., "Transmission of IP Packets over Overlay Multilink > Network (OMNI) Interfaces", Work in Progress, Internet-Draft, > draft-templin-intarea-omni-11, 10 January 2023, < > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-templin-intarea-omni-11>. > > - NEW: > [OMNI] > Templin, F. L., Ed., "Transmission of IP Packets over Overlay Multilink > Network (OMNI) Interfaces", Work in Progress, Internet-Draft, > draft-templin-intarea-omni-25, 15 February 2023, < > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-templin-intarea-omni-25>. > --- > - OLD: > [PARCELS] > Templin, F. L., Ed., "IP Parcels", Work in Progress, Internet-Draft, > draft-templin-intarea-parcels-19, 10 January 2023, < > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-templin-intarea-parcels-19>. > > - NEW: > [PARCELS] > Templin, F. L., Ed., "IP Parcels and Advanced Jumbos", Work in Progress, > Internet-Draft, draft-templin-intarea-parcels-51, 15 February 2023, < > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-templin-intarea-parcels-51>. > --- > > - OLD: > [PSCE] > European Comission, "PSCEurope Public Safety Communications Europe", < > https://www.psc-europe.eu/>. > > - NEW: > [PSCE] > European Commission, "PSCEurope: Public Safety Communications Europe", < > https://www.psc-europe.eu/>. > --- > > - OLD: > [SAINT] > Jeong, J., Jeong, H., Lee, E., Oh, T., and D. H. C. Du, "SAINT: > Self-Adaptive Interactive Navigation Tool for Cloud-Based Vehicular Traffic > Optimization", IEEE Transactions on Vehicular Technology, Volume 65, Issue > 6, DOI 10.1109/TVT.2015.2476958, June 2016, < > https://doi.org/10.1109/TVT.2015.2476958>. > > - NEW: > [SAINT] > Jeong, J., Jeong, H., Lee, E., Oh, T., and D. H. C. Du, "SAINT: > Self-Adaptive Interactive Navigation Tool for Cloud-Based Vehicular Traffic > Optimization", IEEE Transactions on Vehicular Technology, Volume 65, Issue > 6, pp. 4053-4067, DOI 10.1109/TVT.2015.2476958, June 2016, < > https://doi.org/10.1109/TVT.2015.2476958>. > --- > > - OLD: > [SAINTplus] > Shen, Y., Lee, J., Jeong, H., Jeong, J., Lee, E., and D. H. C. Du, > "SAINT+: Self-Adaptive Interactive Navigation Tool+ for Emergency Service > Delivery Optimization", IEEE Transactions on Intelligent Transportation > Systems, Volume 19, Issue 4, DOI 10.1109/TITS.2017.2710881, June 2017, < > https://doi.org/10.1109/TITS.2017.2710881>. > > - NEW: > [SAINTplus] > Shen, Y., Lee, J., Jeong, H., Jeong, J., Lee, E., and D. H. C. Du, > "SAINT+: Self-Adaptive Interactive Navigation Tool+ for Emergency Service > Delivery Optimization", IEEE Transactions on Intelligent Transportation > Systems, Volume 19, Issue 4, pp. 1038-1053, DOI 10.1109/TITS.2017.2710881, > April 2018, <https://doi.org/10.1109/TITS.2017.2710881>. > --- > > - OLD: > [Truck-Platooning] > California Partners for Advanced Transportation Technology (PATH), > "Automated Truck Platooning", < > https://path.berkeley.edu/research/connected-and-automated-vehicles/truck-platooning > >. > > - NEW: > [Truck-Platooning] > California Partners for Advanced Transportation Technology (PATH), "Truck > Platooning", < > https://path.berkeley.edu/research/connected-and-automated-vehicles/truck-platooning > >. > --- > > - OLD: > [VEHICULAR-MM] > Jeong, J., Ed., Mugabarigira, B., Shen, Y., and H. Jung, "Vehicular > Mobility Management for IP-Based Vehicular Networks", Work in Progress, > Internet-Draft, draft-jeong-ipwave-vehicular-mobility-management-08, 25 > July 2022, < > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-jeong-ipwave-vehicular-mobility-management-08 > >. > > - NEW: > [VEHICULAR-MM] > Jeong, J., Ed., Mugabarigira, B., Shen, Y., and H. Jung, "Vehicular > Mobility Management for IP-Based Vehicular Networks", Work in Progress, > Internet-Draft, draft-jeong-ipwave-vehicular-mobility-management-09, 4 > February 2023, < > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-jeong-ipwave-vehicular-mobility-management-09 > >. > --- > > - OLD: > [VEHICULAR-ND] > Jeong, J., Ed., Shen, Y., Kwon, J., and S. Cespedes, "Vehicular Neighbor > Discovery for IP-Based Vehicular Networks", Work in Progress, > Internet-Draft, draft-jeong-ipwave-vehicular-neighbor-discovery-14, 25 July > 2022, < > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-jeong-ipwave-vehicular-neighbor-discovery-14 > >. > > - NEW: > [VEHICULAR-ND] > Jeong, J., Ed., Shen, Y., Kwon, J., and S. Cespedes, "Vehicular Neighbor > Discovery for IP-Based Vehicular Networks", Work in Progress, > Internet-Draft, draft-jeong-ipwave-vehicular-neighbor-discovery-15, 4 > February 2023, < > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-jeong-ipwave-vehicular-neighbor-discovery-15 > >. > --- > > - OLD: > [VIP-WAVE] > Cespedes, S., Lu, N., and X. Shen, "VIP-WAVE: On the Feasibility of IP > Communications in 802.11p Vehicular Networks", IEEE Transactions on > Intelligent Transportation Systems, Volume 14, Issue 1, DOI > 10.1109/TITS.2012.2206387, March 2013, < > https://doi.org/10.1109/TITS.2012.2206387>. > > - NEW: > [VIP-WAVE] > Cespedes, S., Lu, N., and X. Shen, "VIP-WAVE: On the Feasibility of IP > Communications in 802.11p Vehicular Networks", IEEE Transactions on > Intelligent Transportation Systems, Volume 14, Issue 1, pp. 82-97, DOI > 10.1109/TITS.2012.2206387, March 2013, < > https://doi.org/10.1109/TITS.2012.2206387>. > --- > > >> >> Please review if any further changes are needed. We will wait to hear >> from you again before continuing the publication process. This page shows >> the AUTH48 status of your document: >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9365 >> >> => [PAUL] I will proofread the current version tomorrow. > When I am done, I will let you know with possible corrections > by midnight on February 24 (Friday) in Korean Standard Time (UTC +9). > > Thanks. > > Best Regards, > Paul > > >> Thank you. >> RFC Editor/ar >> >> > On Feb 22, 2023, at 10:51 AM, Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong < >> jaehoon.paul@gmail.com> wrote: >> > >> > Hi Alice, >> > Here are my updates with my revision letters >> > so that you can reflect them on the xml file by yourself. >> > >> > I have used my old xml file to reflect my answers, so >> > you can refer to the attached xml for only your reference. >> > >> > If you need my help, please let me know. >> > >> > Thanks. >> > >> > Best Regards, >> > Paul >> > >> > On Tue, Feb 21, 2023 at 1:57 PM Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong < >> jaehoon.paul@gmail.com> wrote: >> > Hi Alice, >> > I will modify the xml file according to your comments and questions >> this week (by February 24 in KST). >> > >> > I will also provide you with a revision letter to show how I have >> updated the text. >> > >> > Thanks. >> > >> > Best Regards, >> > Paul >> > >> > On Sun, Feb 19, 2023 at 2:43 AM Alice Russo <arusso@amsl.com> wrote: >> > Paul, >> > Thank you for your mail. Yes; please know that you have the time needed >> for the review of the edited document and the questions. It's your choice >> whether you update the source file yourself or reply via mail (in which >> case, we will update the source file). We will check in with you at the >> one-week mark if we haven't heard from you. We'll be here for any questions >> or followups on the updates for the document. >> > >> > Thank you. >> > RFC Editor/ar >> > >> > > On Feb 18, 2023, at 3:34 AM, Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong < >> jaehoon.paul@gmail.com> wrote: >> > > >> > > Hi RFC Editor, >> > > I will review your comments and answer them. >> > > Today and tomorrow are the weekend, so I am busy with my Christianity >> worship and fellowship. >> > > Could you allow me to finish them by noon (12pm) next Tuesday >> (February 21) in Korean time? >> > > >> > > Thanks. >> > > >> > > Best Regards, >> > > Jaehoon (Paul) Jeong >> > > >> > > >> > > On Sat, Feb 18, 2023 at 4:19 PM <rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org> wrote: >> > > Greetings, >> > > >> > > While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as >> necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. >> > > >> > > 1) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear >> in the >> > > title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 2) <!--[rfced] We note that "IPWAVE" has been expanded as "IP" >> > > (rather than "IPv6") in the past - for example, in the name of >> > > the IETF working group. Is it intentional to use "IPv6" in >> > > this document without modifying the acronym? >> > > >> > > Title and Section 1 contain: >> > > IPv6 Wireless Access in Vehicular Environments (IPWAVE) >> > > >> > > vs. RFC 8691 (and the IPWAVE WG page) contains: >> > > IP Wireless Access in Vehicular Environments (IPWAVE) >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 3) <!-- [rfced] Would you like the terms in Section 2 to be >> alphabetized? >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 4) <!-- [rfced] We had difficulty parsing this sentence, specifically >> "at >> > > edge". How should it be updated for clarity? Does "at edge" refer to >> > > "at the edge of the network"? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > * Edge Computing Device (ECD): It is a computing device (or >> server) >> > > at edge for vehicles and vulnerable road users. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 5) <!-- [rfced] If LiDAR is the method used by a "LiDAR sensor" or >> > > "LiDAR device" (rather than the device itself), may this definition >> > > be updated as follows, or otherwise? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > * LiDAR: "Light Detection and Ranging". It is a scanning device >> to >> > > measure a distance to an object by emitting pulsed laser light >> and >> > > measuring the reflected pulsed light. >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > * Light Detection and Ranging (LiDAR): This is a method >> > > for measuring a distance to an object by emitting pulsed >> > > laser light and measuring the reflected pulsed light. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 6) <!-- [rfced] Should "dot11OCBActivited" be "dot11OCBActivated" >> > > for correct spelling ("i" changed to "a")? >> > > We note that "dot11OCBActivited" is in Section 2 of RFC 8691. >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > * 802.11-OCB: It refers to the mode specified in IEEE Std >> > > 802.11-2016 [IEEE-802.11-OCB] when the MIB attribute >> > > dot11OCBActivited is 'true'. >> > > >> > > Suggested: >> > > * 802.11-OCB: This refers to the mode specified in IEEE Std >> > > 802.11-2016 [IEEE-802.11-OCB] when the MIB attribute >> > > dot11OCBActivated is 'true'. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 7) <!-- [rfced] FYI, so that it wouldn't appear that "safe driving" >> describes >> > > "avoidance", we updated "safe driving and collision avoidance" to >> > > "driving safely and avoiding collisions". Please let us know if this >> > > isn't agreeable. >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > * Context-aware navigation for safe driving and collision >> avoidance >> > > >> > > Current: >> > > * Context-aware navigation for driving safely and avoiding >> collisions >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 8) <!-- [rfced] FYI, for clarity concerning "UAM end systems in air", >> we >> > > rephrased this sentence. Please review. >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > A collision avoidance service of UAM end systems in air can be >> > > envisioned as a use case in air vehicular environments >> > > [I-D.templin-ipwave-uam-its]. >> > > >> > > Current: >> > > A service for collision avoidance of in-air UAM end systems is one >> > > possible use case in air vehicular environments [UAM-ITS]. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 9) <!-- [rfced] Can only trucks or any type of vehicle use V2V >> communication >> > > in this case? If the latter, we suggest replacing "Trucks" with >> "Vehicles". >> > > (The preceding sentence is included for context.) >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > Platooning [Truck-Platooning] allows a series (or group) of >> vehicles >> > > (e.g., trucks) to follow each other very closely. Trucks can use >> V2V >> > > communication in addition to forward sensors in order to maintain >> > > constant clearance between two consecutive vehicles at very short >> > > gaps (from 3 meters to 10 meters). >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > Platooning [Truck-Platooning] allows a series (or group) of >> vehicles >> > > (e.g., trucks) to follow each other very closely. Vehicles can >> use V2V >> > > communication in addition to forward sensors in order to maintain >> > > constant clearance between two consecutive vehicles at very short >> > > gaps (from 3 to 10 meters). >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 10) <!-- [rfced] Please clarify "accident vehicles"; does it refer to >> > > vehicles in a collision, rather than vehicles responding to a >> collision? >> > > >> > > Also, since "IP-RSU" is not a type of network, we suggest rephrasing >> > > the final list. Should it be via "an IP-RSU" or "IP-RSUs" (plural)? >> > > >> > > How may we update this sentence for clarity? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > The emergency communication between accident vehicles (or emergency >> > > vehicles) and a TCC can be performed via either IP-RSU, 4G-LTE or >> 5G >> > > networks. >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > The emergency communication between vehicles in an accident (or >> > > emergency-response vehicles) and a TCC can be performed via either >> > > an IP-RSU or 4G-LTE or 5G networks. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 11) <!-- [rfced] How may this sentence be updated to make the list >> > > items parallel? Also, what does "a used approach" refer to? >> > > For the reader, is there some context to provide for citing >> > > HIP certificates [RFC8002]? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > These extra means can be certificate-based, >> > > biometric, credit-based, and one-time passcode (OTP) approaches in >> > > addition to a used approach [RFC8002]. >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > These extra means could include approaches based on certificates, >> > > biometrics, credit, or One-Time Passwords (OTPs) >> > > in addition to Host Identity Protocol certificates [RFC8002]. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 12) <!--[rfced] Please clarify this sentence, in particular the phrase >> > > "classify to different severity levels for driving safety". Does it >> > > mean the messages are classified into severity levels based >> > > on their potential significance to driving safety, or otherwise? >> > > Also, does "credit for the sender" refer to the "credit of the >> sender"? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > First, a credit- >> > > based means is to let a vehicle classify the received messages sent >> > > by another host to different severity levels for driving safety in >> > > order to calculate the credit for the sender. >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > First, a credit- >> > > based method is when a vehicle classifies the messages it received >> > > from another host into various levels based on their potential >> > > effects on driving safety in order to calculate the credit of that >> sender. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 13) <!-- [rfced] This sentence is quite complex, making it difficult >> to parse. >> > > May we replace "which" with "This improvement" to split this into two >> > > sentences? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > For the reliability required in V2V networking, the ND optimization >> > > defined in MANET [RFC6130] [RFC7466] improves the classical IPv6 ND >> > > in terms of tracking neighbor information with up to two hops and >> > > introducing several extensible Information Bases, which serves the >> > > MANET routing protocols such as the different versions of Optimized >> > > Link State Routing Protocol (OLSR) [RFC3626] [RFC7181], Open >> Shortest >> > > Path First (OSPF) derivatives (e.g., [RFC5614]), and Dynamic Link >> > > Exchange Protocol (DLEP) [RFC8175] with its extensions [RFC8629] >> > > [RFC8757]. >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > For the reliability required in V2V networking, the ND optimization >> > > defined in the Mobile Ad Hoc Network (MANET) [RFC6130] [RFC7466] >> > > improves the classical IPv6 ND in terms of tracking neighbor >> > > information with up to two hops and introducing several extensible >> > > Information Bases. This improvement serves the MANET routing >> > > protocols, such as the different versions of Optimized Link State >> > > Routing Protocol (OLSR) [RFC3626] [RFC7181], Open Shortest Path >> > > First (OSPF) derivatives (e.g., [RFC5614]), and Dynamic Link >> > > Exchange Protocol (DLEP) [RFC8175] with its extensions [RFC8629] >> > > [RFC8757]. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 14) <!--[rfced] Please clarify this sentence, in particular "leads >> the half >> > > of the link lifetime". >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > This relative speed leads the half of the link lifetime between the >> > > vehicle and the IP-RSU. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 15) <!--[rfced] Please review how "not-onlink" has been rephrased >> > > and let us know any updates. That term has been avoided because it >> > > has not appeared in other RFCs and is not consistent with the hyphen >> > > in the term "on-link". Please note that RFC 8691 uses the phrase >> > > "advertised as not on-link". For example: >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > a destination vehicle [..] needs to be distinguished as either >> > > an on-link host or a not-onlink host >> > > >> > > Current: >> > > a destination vehicle [..] needs to be distinguished as either >> > > as a host that is either on-link or not on-link >> > > >> > > In Section 5.1.1, three instances were updated as follows (please >> > > see the diff file for context). >> > > - a prefix that is not on-link >> > > - the prefix should be not on-link. >> > > - prefixes that are not on-link >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 16) <!--[rfced] Please clarify this sentence, in particular "can >> maintain its >> > > neighboring vehicles in a stable way". >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > For example, the NA interval needs to be >> > > dynamically adjusted according to a vehicle's speed so that the >> > > vehicle can maintain its neighboring vehicles in a stable way, ... >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > For example, the NA interval needs to be >> > > dynamically adjusted according to a vehicle's speed so that the >> > > vehicle can maintain its position relative to its neighboring >> > > vehicles in a stable way, ... >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 17) <!-- [rfced] How may this text be rephrased to clarify it? The >> > > original reads as though the RFC "installs the ND cache entries". >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > [RFC8505], as >> > > opposed to [RFC4861], is stateful and proactively installs the ND >> > > cache entries, which saves broadcasts and provides deterministic >> > > presence information for IPv6 addresses. Mainly it updates the >> > > Address Registration Option (ARO) of ND defined in [RFC6775] to >> > > include a status field that can indicate the movement of a node and >> > > optionally a Transaction ID (TID) field, i.e., a sequence number >> that >> > > can be used to determine the most recent location of a node. >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > (Option A) >> > > [RFC8505], as >> > > opposed to [RFC4861], states how to proactively install the ND >> > > cache entries. This saves broadcasts and provides deterministic >> > > presence information for IPv6 addresses. The installation then >> > > updates the Address Registration Option (ARO) of ND defined in >> > > [RFC6775] to include a status field that can indicate the movement >> > > of a node and optionally a Transaction ID (TID) field, i.e., a >> > > sequence number that can be used to determine the most recent >> > > location of a node. >> > > >> > > (Option B) >> > > The extension described in [RFC8505] is stateful >> > > and proactively installs the ND cache entries; this saves >> broadcasts >> > > and provides deterministic presence information for IPv6 >> addresses. >> > > Mainly, it updates the Address Registration Option (ARO) of ND >> > > defined in [RFC6775] to include a status field (which can indicate >> > > the movement of a node) and optionally a Transaction ID (TID) >> field >> > > (which is a sequence number that can be used to determine the most >> > > recent location of a node). >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 18) <!-- [rfced] Please clarify "the SLAAC with [RFC8505]". Does it >> > > mean "SLAAC with the registration extension specified in >> > > [RFC8505]" or otherwise? >> > > >> > > Also, will the phrase "costs a DAD" be clear to the reader? >> > > Does it mean "costs DAD overhead" or otherwise? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > Even though the SLAAC with classic ND costs a DAD during mobility >> > > management, the SLAAC with [RFC8505] and/or AERO/OMNI do not cost a >> > > DAD. >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > Even though SLAAC with classic ND costs DAD overhead during >> > > mobility management, SLAAC with the registration extension >> > > specified in [RFC8505] and/or with AERO/OMNI does not cost DAD >> overhead. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 19) <!--[rfced] Please clarify "among them"; does it mean mutual >> > > authentication of the vehicles? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > In addition, >> > > to prevent bogus IP-RSUs and MA from interfering with the IPv6 >> > > mobility of vehicles, mutual authentication among them needs to be >> > > performed by certificates (e.g., TLS certificate). >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > In addition, >> > > to prevent bogus IP-RSUs and MA from interfering with the IPv6 >> > > mobility of vehicles, mutual authentication of the vehicles needs >> > > to be performed by certificates (e.g., TLS certificate). >> > > >> > > Or simply cut "among them": >> > > In addition, >> > > to prevent bogus IP-RSUs and MA from interfering with the IPv6 >> > > mobility of vehicles, mutual authentication needs to be >> > > performed by certificates (e.g., TLS certificate). >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 20) <!-- [rfced] Would you like the references to be alphabetized >> > > or left in their current order? (This would be done by setting >> > > the rfc element's sortRefs attribute to true.) >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 21) <!-- [rfced] The title in this reference does not match the title >> of the >> > > document available from the provided URL. So would you like to keep >> > > the URL and update the title? Or, perhaps a different URL was >> intended? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > [FCC-ITS-Modification] >> > > Federal Communications Commission, "Use of the >> 5.850-5.925 >> > > GHz Band, First Report and Order, Further Notice of >> > > Proposed Rulemaking, and Order of Proposed Modification, >> > > FCC 19-138", Available: >> https://www.fcc.gov/document/fcc- >> > > modernizes-59-ghz-band-improve-wi-fi-and-automotive- >> > > safety-0, November 2020. >> > > >> > > Perhaps: >> > > [FCC-ITS-Modification] >> > > Federal Communications Commission, "FCC Modernizes 5.9 >> GHz >> > > Band to Improve Wi-Fi and Automotive Safety", November >> 2020, >> > > <https://www.fcc.gov/document/fcc-modernizes-59- >> > > ghz-band-improve-wi-fi-and-automotive-safety-0>. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 22) <!-- [rfced] Are there exactly two modes for routing in RPL? >> > > If so, may we update the sentence as follows? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > There are two modes for routing in RPL >> > > such as non-storing mode and storing mode. >> > > >> > > Perhaps (remove "such as"): >> > > There are two modes for routing in RPL: >> > > non-storing mode and storing mode. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 23) <!-- [rfced] Some author comments are present in the XML. Please >> confirm >> > > that no updates related to these comments are outstanding. Note that >> the >> > > comments will be deleted prior to publication. >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 24) <!-- [rfced] Terminology and Capitalization >> > > >> > > a) Will it be clear to readers what the following terms are? If not, >> > > please let us know if definitions should be added to Section 2. >> > > >> > > gNodeB >> > > eNodeB >> > > >> > > We note that RFC 9269 contains: >> > > eNodeB: The eNodeB is a base station entity that supports the Long >> > > Term Evolution (LTE) air interface. >> > > >> > > >> > > b) In this definition, "Vehicle" is capitalized but throughout the >> > > document it isn't. Would you like to make this instance lowercase or, >> > > would you like any other instances of "vehicle" to be capitalized? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > * Vehicle: A Vehicle in this document is a node that has an IP-OBU >> > > for wireless communication with other vehicles and IP-RSUs. >> > > >> > > >> > > c) In this definition, "Vehicular Cloud” is capitalized but >> throughout the >> > > document it is sometimes capitalized and sometimes not. How may we >> update >> > > for consistency? >> > > >> > > Original: >> > > * Vehicular Cloud: A cloud infrastructure for vehicular networks, >> > > having compute nodes, storage nodes, and network forwarding >> > > elements (e.g., switch and router). >> > > --> >> > > >> > > >> > > 25) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of >> the online >> > > Style Guide < >> https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> >> > > and let us know if any changes are needed. >> > > >> > > Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this >> should >> > > still be reviewed as a best practice. >> > > >> > > In addition, please consider whether "traditional helicopter" should >> be >> > > updated for clarity. 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