Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9452 <draft-ietf-sfc-ioam-nsh-13> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9452 <draft-ietf-sfc-ioam-nsh-13> for your review
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Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!-- [rfced] Please note that the title of the document has been updated as follows ("In-situ" to "In Situ"): Original: Network Service Header (NSH) Encapsulation for In-situ OAM (IOAM) Data Current: Network Service Header (NSH) Encapsulation for In Situ OAM (IOAM) Data --> 2) <!-- [rfced] We are having trouble understanding "by means of configuration." Does the suggested text convey the intended meaning? Also, does "encapsulating/decapsulating" mean "encapsulating and decapsulating" or "encapsulating or decapsulating"? Original: In an administrative domain where IOAM is used, insertion of the IOAM header in NSH is enabled at the NSH tunnel endpoints, which also serve as IOAM encapsulating/decapsulating nodes by means of configuration. Perhaps: In an administrative domain where IOAM is used, insertion of the IOAM header in NSH is enabled at the NSH tunnel endpoints, which are also configured to serve as IOAM encapsulating and decapsulating nodes. --> 3) <!-- [rfced] This text appears in and points to Section 3. May we delete "Section 3"? Please review. Original: The operator MUST ensure that SFC-aware nodes along the Service Function Path support IOAM, otherwise packets might be dropped (see Section 3 further below, as well as [RFC8300] Section 2.2). Perhaps: The operator MUST ensure that SFC-aware nodes along the Service Function Path support IOAM; otherwise, packets might be dropped (see more below, as well as Section 2.2 of [RFC8300]). --> 4) <!-- [rfced] Would it be helpful to expand MD for the reader? Perhaps it could be added to list of abbreviations introduced in Section 2? --> 5) <!-- [rfced] For readability, we have updated the text as follows. Please let us know if any corrections are needed. Original: Per Section 2.2 of [RFC8300], packets with Next Protocol values not supported SHOULD be silently dropped by default. Current: Per Section 2.2 of [RFC8300], packets with unsupported Next Protocol values SHOULD be silently dropped by default. --> 6) <!-- [rfced] For readability, may we update the text as follows? Original: IOAM is considered a "per domain" feature, where the operator decides on leveraging and configuring IOAM according to the operator's needs. Suggested: IOAM is considered a "per domain" feature, where the operator decides how to leverage and configure IOAM according to the operator's needs. --> 7) <!-- [rfced] For clarity, may we update the text as follows? Please let us know if any corrections are needed. Original: Hardware and software friendly implementation: Hardware forwarders benefit from an encapsulation that minimizes iterative look-ups of fields within the packet: Any operation which looks up the value of a field within the packet, based on which another lookup is performed, consumes additional gates and time in an implementation - both of which are desired to be kept to a minimum. Current: Hardware- and software-friendly implementation: Hardware forwarders benefit from an encapsulation that minimizes iterative lookups of fields within the packet. Any operation that looks up the value of a field within the packet, based on which another lookup is performed, consumes additional gates and time in an implementation, both of which should be kept to a minimum. --> 8) <!-- [rfced] Terminology a) We note that Figure 1 contains “IOAM Option and Optional Data Space”, while the text defines “IOAM Option and Data Space”. Please review and let us know if these should be consistent. b) These terms may be used inconsistently. Please review and let us know if the forms on the right (on the right of the arrow) should be used consistently, or if any other updates are needed. IOAM-Data-fields & IOAM data fields -> IOAM-Data-Fields IOAM-Option-Types -> IOAM Option-Type --> 9) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> and let us know if any changes are needed. Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this should still be reviewed as a best practice. --> Thank you. RFC Editor On Jul 31, 2023, at 7:53 PM, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: *****IMPORTANT***** Updated 2023/07/31 RFC Author(s): -------------- Instructions for Completing AUTH48 Your document has now entered AUTH48. Once it has been reviewed and approved by you and all coauthors, it will be published as an RFC. 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Thank you for your cooperation, RFC Editor -------------------------------------- RFC9452 (draft-ietf-sfc-ioam-nsh-13) Title : Network Service Header (NSH) Encapsulation for In-situ OAM (IOAM) Data Author(s) : F. Brockners, Ed., S. Bhandari, Ed. WG Chair(s) : Joel M. Halpern, Jim Guichard Area Director(s) : Alvaro Retana, John Scudder, Andrew Alston
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