Re: [DNSOP] WGLC: Requirements for Management of Name Servers for the DNS

Doug Barton wrote:
> Peter Koch wrote:
>   
>> Dear WG,
>>
>> this is to initiate a working group last call on
>>
>>         "Requirements for Management of Name Servers for the DNS"
>>         draft-ietf-dnsop-name-server-management-reqs-02.txt
>>
>> ending Friday, 2009-04-10, 23:59 UTC.  The tools site gives easy access to
>> diffs and such under
>>  <http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-dnsop-name-server-management-reqs-02>.
>>     
>
> I've read the draft at the URL above and am generally supportive of
> its moving forward. I noticed the following nits. Assuming that the
> grammatical issues could be sorted out down the road I would not
> object to the draft moving forward without the other issues I mention
> below being addressed.
>
>
> hope this helps,
>
> Doug
>
>
> Abstract: "not a interoperable" should be "not an ..."
> Abstract: The last paragraph is awkward. Perhaps:
> 	This document discusses the requirements of a management
> 	system for DNS name servers and can be used as a shopping
> 	list of needed features for such a system.
>   

As long as you are being nit picky the phrase "(Domain Name Service) 
name servers" reads kinda funny. How about just DNS Resolver's or 
something like that?

T.
> 1. Introduction: "not a interoperable" should be "not an ..."
> 1. Introduction: The awkward paragraph from the Abstract is repeated here.
> 2.1.1 Zone Size Constraints: The last sentence is awkward. Perhaps:
> 	Both deployment scenarios are common.
> 2.1.3 Configuration Data Volatility: Same as 2.1.1 above.
> 2.1.5 Common Data Model: "is needed for of the operations discussion"
> 	the "of" there should be removed
> 3.1.1 Needed Control Operations
> 	The ability to do a reload on an individual zone should probably be
> mentioned here.
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