Re: [Dots] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-14: (with COMMENT)
Hayashi Yuhei <yuuhei.hayashi@gmail.com> Sun, 23 October 2022 08:14 UTC
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Date: Sun, 23 Oct 2022 17:14:28 +0900
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To: Lars Eggert <lars@eggert.org>
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Subject: Re: [Dots] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-14: (with COMMENT)
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Hi Lars, Thank you for your comments. We updated the draft to address your comment. Diff is here. https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-15 Please see inline. 2022年10月20日(木) 21:24 Lars Eggert via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org>: > > Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for > draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-14: No Objection > > When responding, please keep the subject line intact and reply to all > email addresses included in the To and CC lines. (Feel free to cut this > introductory paragraph, however.) > > > Please refer to https://www.ietf.org/about/groups/iesg/statements/handling-ballot-positions/ > for more information about how to handle DISCUSS and COMMENT positions. > > > The document, along with other ballot positions, can be found here: > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases/ > > > > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > COMMENT: > ---------------------------------------------------------------------- > > # GEN AD review of draft-ietf-dots-telemetry-use-cases-14 > > CC @larseggert > > Thanks to Peter E. Yee for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review > (https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/jpVrKg9QCjWlcKWgprDRW0Q09lY). > > ## Nits > > All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to > address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by > automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there > will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you > did with these suggestions. > > ### Grammar/style > > #### Section 1, paragraph 1 > ``` > highly automated. To that aim, multi-vendor components involved in DDoS atta > ^^^^^^^^^^^^ > ``` > This word is normally spelled as one. (Also elsewhere.) [Yuhei] We addressed the comment. s/multi-vendor/multivendor/g > > #### Section 3.1.5, paragraph 2 > ``` > S mitigation service by reporting on-going and detailed DDoS countermeasure > ^^^^^^^^ > ``` > Did you mean "ongoing"? (Also elsewhere.) [Yuhei] Yes. We addressed the comment. s/on-going/ongoing/g > > #### Section 3.2, paragraph 6 > ``` > irroring to copy the traffic destined a IP address and to monitor the traffic > ^ > ``` > Use "an" instead of "a" if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. > "an article", "an hour". [Yuhei] We addressed the comment. > > ## Notes > > This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use the > [`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into > individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT]. > > [ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md > [ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments > [IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool > > > -- ---------------------------------- Yuuhei HAYASHI 08065300884 yuuhei.hayashi@gmail.com iehuuy_0220@docomo.ne.jp ----------------------------------
- [Dots] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-d… Lars Eggert via Datatracker
- Re: [Dots] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ie… Hayashi Yuhei