Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC/Telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01
"Andrew G. Malis" <agmalis@gmail.com> Mon, 28 September 2015 15:19 UTC
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From: "Andrew G. Malis" <agmalis@gmail.com>
Date: Mon, 28 Sep 2015 11:19:12 -0400
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC/Telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01
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Peter, Thanks for your careful read and the detailed list of nits! I'll wait to hear back from the IESG as to whether they would prefer to see a new revision, or will pass the list of nits to the RFC Editor. Thanks again, Andy On Mon, Sep 28, 2015 at 7:30 AM, Peter Yee <peter@akayla.com> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review > Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for > the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or > AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01 > Reviewer: Peter Yee > Review Date: Sep-28-2015 > IETF LC End Date: Sep-30-2015 > IESG Telechat date: Sep-30-2015 > > Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication as an Informational > RFC, but has a nit that should be fixed before publication. [Ready with > nits] > > The draft discusses requirements that apply to the expedited setup of > GMPLS LSPs in scenarios that may have high churn. The text can be a bit > dense in the descriptive sections, but the requirements are easily > understood. > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits: > > Page 2, Section 1, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: delete the commas > following “setup” and “blocking”. > > > Page 3, 1st partial paragraph, 1st full sentence: change “set up” to > “setup”. > > Page 3, 2nd full paragraph, 1st sentence: delete “intends to”. Change > “present” to “presents”. > > Page 3, Section 2, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: append a comma after > “sub-wavelength”. > > Page 3, Section 2, 1st paragraph, 3rd sentence: delete the comma after > “requirements”. > > Page 4, Section 3, item 2, 1st sentence: change the first “setup” to “set > up”. > > Page 4, Section 3, item 2, 3rd sentence: delete “a” before “packet-only”. > > Page 4, Section 3, 2nd paragraph after items, 2nd sentence: append a comma > after “e.g.”. > > Page 5, Section 4.1, 1st paragraph: change the space after performance to > a hyphen. > > Page 5, Section 4.1, 1st item: change “rate” to “rates” and both > occurrences of “request” to “requests”. > > Page 6, Section 5, 3rd sentence: delete “be”. > > Page 6, item R3: insert “the” before “number”. > > Page 7, item R8: append a comma after “e.g.”. > > > > >
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC/Telechat review of draft-iet… Peter Yee
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC/Telechat review of draft… Andrew G. Malis
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC/Telechat review of draft… Jari Arkko