[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-spbm-evpn-01.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Mon, 28 September 2015 13:16 UTC
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-bess-spbm-evpn-01.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20150925 IETF LC End Date: 20150924 IESG Telechat date: 20151001 Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - Abstract page 1: my spell checker complains about subtending? (IMHO you should make it happy for the Abstract, i.e., change the Abstract wording (and only the Abstract wording)). - ToC page 2 and 6 page 9: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 3 page 4: Reachabilty -> Reachability - 4.1 page 6: may be different -> can be different (or any wording which doesn't use a RFC 2119 keyword even in lower case in an ambiguous way) - 4.6 page 8 (twice): SPsourceID -> SPSourceID (note I suppose the correct spelling is SPSourceID, anyway it can't be both SPsourceID and SPSourceID so the document must be fixed) - 6 page 9: please insert a blank line before. - 9.1 page 10 (twice): spurious breaks in 802.1* references - 10 page 11: add USA (BTW it should be formally US (ISO IS 3166 2 letters) but the UPU says USA and it is what the first (and only correct) entry has... Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-spbm-evpn-01.… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bess-spbm-evpn… Jari Arkko