[Gen-art] Gen-ART LC/Telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01
Peter Yee <peter@akayla.com> Mon, 28 September 2015 11:30 UTC
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01 Reviewer: Peter Yee Review Date: Sep-28-2015 IETF LC End Date: Sep-30-2015 IESG Telechat date: Sep-30-2015 Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication as an Informational RFC, but has a nit that should be fixed before publication. [Ready with nits] The draft discusses requirements that apply to the expedited setup of GMPLS LSPs in scenarios that may have high churn. The text can be a bit dense in the descriptive sections, but the requirements are easily understood. Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits: Page 2, Section 1, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: delete the commas following “setup” and “blocking”. Page 3, 1st partial paragraph, 1st full sentence: change “set up” to “setup”. Page 3, 2nd full paragraph, 1st sentence: delete “intends to”. Change “present” to “presents”. Page 3, Section 2, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “sub-wavelength”. Page 3, Section 2, 1st paragraph, 3rd sentence: delete the comma after “requirements”. Page 4, Section 3, item 2, 1st sentence: change the first “setup” to “set up”. Page 4, Section 3, item 2, 3rd sentence: delete “a” before “packet-only”. Page 4, Section 3, 2nd paragraph after items, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “e.g.”. Page 5, Section 4.1, 1st paragraph: change the space after performance to a hyphen. Page 5, Section 4.1, 1st item: change “rate” to “rates” and both occurrences of “request” to “requests”. Page 6, Section 5, 3rd sentence: delete “be”. Page 6, item R3: insert “the” before “number”. Page 7, item R8: append a comma after “e.g.”.
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC/Telechat review of draft-iet… Peter Yee
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC/Telechat review of draft… Andrew G. Malis
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC/Telechat review of draft… Jari Arkko