Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC/Telechat review of draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01

[Jari Arkko <[e-mail]>]

Many thanks for your careful read, Peter!

Jari

On 28 Sep 2015, at 18:19, Andrew G. Malis <[e-mail]> wrote:

> Peter,
> 
> Thanks for your careful read and the detailed list of nits! I'll wait to hear back from the IESG as to whether they would prefer to see a new revision, or will pass the list of nits to the RFC Editor.
> 
> Thanks again,
> Andy
> 
> 
> On Mon, Sep 28, 2015 at 7:30 AM, Peter Yee <[e-mail]> wrote:
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review
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> 
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> 
> Document: draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01
> Reviewer: Peter Yee
> Review Date: Sep-28-2015
> IETF LC End Date: Sep-30-2015
> IESG Telechat date: Sep-30-2015
> 
> Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication as an Informational
> RFC, but has a nit that should be fixed before publication. [Ready with
> nits]
> 
> The draft discusses requirements that apply to the expedited setup of
> GMPLS LSPs in scenarios that may have high churn.  The text can be a bit
> dense in the descriptive sections, but the requirements are easily
> understood.
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues: None
> 
> Nits:
> 
> Page 2, Section 1, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: delete the commas
> following “setup” and “blocking”.
> 
> 
> Page 3, 1st partial paragraph, 1st full sentence: change “set up” to
> “setup”.
> 
> Page 3, 2nd full paragraph, 1st sentence: delete “intends to”.  Change
> “present” to “presents”.
> 
> Page 3, Section 2, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: append a comma after
> “sub-wavelength”.
> 
> Page 3, Section 2, 1st paragraph, 3rd sentence: delete the comma after
> “requirements”.
> 
> Page 4, Section 3, item 2, 1st sentence: change the first “setup” to “set
> up”.
> 
> Page 4, Section 3, item 2, 3rd sentence: delete “a” before “packet-only”.
> 
> Page 4, Section 3, 2nd paragraph after items, 2nd sentence: append a comma
> after “e.g.”.
> 
> Page 5, Section 4.1, 1st paragraph: change the space after performance to
> a hyphen.
> 
> Page 5, Section 4.1, 1st item: change “rate” to “rates” and both
> occurrences of “request” to “requests”.
> 
> Page 6, Section 5, 3rd sentence: delete “be”.
> 
> Page 6, item R3: insert “the” before “number”.
> 
> Page 7, item R8: append a comma after “e.g.”.
> 
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