Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART telechat review of draft-ietf-mediactrl-call-flows-13.txt

Brian: Thank you for your review, and thank you Lorenzo for taking these comments into account. I have balloted No-Objection for this document.

jari

On Sep 9, 2013, at 6:08 PM, Lorenzo Miniero <lorenzo@meetecho.com> wrote:

> Brian,
> 
> thanks for the review! We'll add those elements to the terminology
> section.
> 
> About the "Mealy automaton", rather than adding a reference to pages
> like Wikipedia, I'd go for an inline indication to the reader. Would it
> be ok to add the "finite state automaton" in brackets after the text
> where "Mealy automaton" is first introduced?
> 
> Thanks,
> Lorenzo 
> 
> 
> Il giorno Sun, 08 Sep 2013 13:05:55 +1200
> Brian E Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> ha scritto:
> 
>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
>> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
>> http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq.
>> 
>> Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before
>> posting a new version of the draft.
>> 
>> Document: draft-ietf-mediactrl-call-flows-13.txt (Informational)
>> Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
>> Review Date: 2013-09-08
>> IETF LC End Date: 2013-09-03
>> IESG Telechat date: 2013-09-12
>> 
>> Summary:  Ready
>> --------
>> 
>> Comment:
>> --------
>> 
>> This is a massive (175pp) and highly specialised document, for which
>> a generalist review is pretty much useless. I have not checked the
>> example flows, XML extracts, etc. IMHO, we have to trust the authors
>> and the WG in a case like this.
>> 
>> The document is clear and where I have sampled the text in the
>> examples it is up to standard.
>> 
>> This review is the same as for Last Call; my comments are just
>> editorial suggestions.
>> 
>> Editorial:
>> ----------
>> 
>> There are a few abbreviations (AS, MS, CFW) that could usefully be
>> included in the Terminology section.
>> 
>> Also, AS is widely used in the IETF to mean Autonomous System. Some
>> readers might be confused at first, so this should be stated very
>> clearly.
>> 
>> "Mealy automaton" (section 4.1) needs a reference. Or it might be
>> sufficient just to say "finite state automaton."
>> 
> 
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