Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART telechat review of draft-ietf-mediactrl-call-flows-13.txt

[Lorenzo Miniero <[e-mail]>]

Brian,

thanks for the review! We'll add those elements to the terminology
section.

About the "Mealy automaton", rather than adding a reference to pages
like Wikipedia, I'd go for an inline indication to the reader. Would it
be ok to add the "finite state automaton" in brackets after the text
where "Mealy automaton" is first introduced?

Thanks,
Lorenzo 


Il giorno Sun, 08 Sep 2013 13:05:55 +1200
Brian E Carpenter <[e-mail]> ha scritto:

> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
> http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq.
> 
> Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before
> posting a new version of the draft.
> 
> Document: draft-ietf-mediactrl-call-flows-13.txt (Informational)
> Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
> Review Date: 2013-09-08
> IETF LC End Date: 2013-09-03
> IESG Telechat date: 2013-09-12
> 
> Summary:  Ready
> --------
> 
> Comment:
> --------
> 
> This is a massive (175pp) and highly specialised document, for which
> a generalist review is pretty much useless. I have not checked the
> example flows, XML extracts, etc. IMHO, we have to trust the authors
> and the WG in a case like this.
> 
> The document is clear and where I have sampled the text in the
> examples it is up to standard.
> 
> This review is the same as for Last Call; my comments are just
> editorial suggestions.
> 
> Editorial:
> ----------
> 
> There are a few abbreviations (AS, MS, CFW) that could usefully be
> included in the Terminology section.
> 
> Also, AS is widely used in the IETF to mean Autonomous System. Some
> readers might be confused at first, so this should be stated very
> clearly.
> 
> "Mealy automaton" (section 4.1) needs a reference. Or it might be
> sufficient just to say "finite state automaton."
>