[Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-geopriv-held-identity-extensions-05

["Vijay K. Gurbani" <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-ietf-geopriv-held-identity-extensions-05
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Oct-28-2010
IETF LC End Date: unknown
IESG Telechat date: Nov-11-2010

Summary: This draft is ready as an Proposed Standard.
Major issues: 0
Minor issues: 0
Nits/editorial comments: 2

Nits:

1) S1.1, paragraph one.  Suggested change below to make the intent
clear.  I am assuming that in the absence of your draft, the identity
of the requester is simply the source IP address.

OLD:
    If device identity is present, the identity of the requester is
    not used to identify the subject of the request.

NEW:
    If device identity is present, the identity of the requester in the
    form of the source IP address is not used to identify the subject
    of the request.

2) S2, opening paragraph.  I am not sure why the note to differentiate
identifiers from measurement information (maybe the WG deliberated on
this and decided to put this text in there; if so, please disregard
my comment.)  It seems to me that the using the IP address as an
identifier is what causes confusion with measurement information, yes?
The same IP can be re-assigned to another device once a DHCP lease
is up.  If that is indeed the case, please consider making it explicit.

- vijay
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