Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-07.txt
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Hi Francis, Thank you very much! I will work out all your comments! Best regards, Georgios ________________________________________ Van: Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr [Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr] Verzonden: zaterdag 14 januari 2012 10:13 Aan: gen-art@ietf.org CC: draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements.all@tools.ietf.org Onderwerp: review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-07.txt I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-07.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20120106 IETF LC End Date: 20120113 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - in the whole document: behaviour -> behavior and signalling -> signaling (note the spelling of collocated is dubious too) - Abstract page 1: in the latter case -> in the first case - Abstract page 1: the usage is to not refer to RFC in the Abstract - ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 2 page 3: measures- -> measures (in general the document is at the limit of abuse of '-' character, here it is clearly a typo) - 6 page 6: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 6 page 6: I don't like the term 'generated', IMHO you can easily find a better/nicer term. - 7.2 page 7: C. Le Faucher, -> C., Le Faucheur, ^ ^ Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requ… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-… karagian
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-… David Harrington
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-… karagian