Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building-08
peter van der Stok <stokcons@xs4all.nl> Mon, 23 March 2015 19:18 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building-08
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Hi Adrian, good news. I try to do the update this week. Greetings, thanks, Peter Adrian Farrel schreef op 2015-03-23 20:12: > Hi Peter, > > This all looks good. > The changes are small, but it would be worth catching them in a new > revision. > Please post it when you have it, no need to check with me. > > Once you've done that, we'll hand it over to Alvaro as the incoming AD, > and he > can put it on an IESG telechat. > > Cheers, > Adrian > > >> -----Original Message----- >> From: peter van der Stok [mailto:stokcons@xs4all.nl] >> Sent: 23 March 2015 14:49 >> To: Meral Shirazipour >> Cc: draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building.all@tools.ietf.org; > gen-art@ietf.org >> Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of >> draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home- >> building-08 >> >> HI Meral, >> >> Thanks for the suggestions. >> I have no problem with any of them. I think they are quite justified. >> Thank you very much for pointing them out. >> Concerning scene and group control. I may suppress the word "scene". >> About [occuswitch] I have to look for a valid alternative. However, >> these links are maintained by a company, which changes information >> frequently. >> Sorry for missing out some of the acronyms. I thought I caught them >> out >> all. >> >> Greetings, >> >> Peter >> >> >> Meral Shirazipour schreef op 2015-03-22 21:28: >> > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >> > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >> > http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq. >> > >> > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments >> > you may receive. >> > >> > Document: draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building-08 >> > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour >> > Review Date: 2015-03-21 >> > IETF LC End Date: 2015-03-23 >> > IESG Telechat date: NA >> > >> > >> > Summary: >> > This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have >> > some comments. >> > >> > Major issues: >> > >> > Minor issues: >> > >> > Nits/editorial comments: >> > -[Page 1], "RPL" first used in title/abstract, Would be good to spell >> > it out. >> > -[Page 5], Section 2, "Monitoring of functional correctness is at >> > least as important.". As important as what? (not clear) >> > -[Page 5], Section 2, "Devices typically communicate their status >> > regularly and send alarm messages notifying a malfunction of equipment >> > or network." >> > Not clear what equipment is? network node is an equipment? >> > -[Page 6], Section 2.1, "for large installation"--->"for a large >> > installation" >> > -[Page 8], Section 2.2.2, "fire detectors and the smoke dampers need >> > to be put in place to meet the stringent delay requirements." >> > Where can we find a value for the delay requirement of fire detectors? >> > A value or reference would be good. >> > -[Page 9], Section 2.2.4,"advanced scene and group control". Not clear >> > what "scene" means. >> > -[Page 13], Section 4.1, "assumes the role as >> > authoritative"--->"assumes the role of authoritative" >> > -[Page 16], section 4.1.8, please spell out first use CBC-MAC (Cipher >> > Block Chaining Message Authentication Code) >> > -[Page 16], section 4.1.10, it would be good to give the RFCs. >> > -[Page 16], section 4.2.4, MLE to spell out at first use "mesh link >> > establishment" >> > -[Page 22], "CoAp" first used in section 7.4, but spelled out in >> > section 8. >> > -[Page 18], section 5.1.1., "to throw away too late messages", how are >> > too late messages identified? >> > -[Page 27], [I-D.ietf-6lo-lowpanz] to be replaced by RFC7428 >> > -[Page 28], link to [occuswitch] to be verified. >> > -Through the document both "ms" and "msec" are used. Selecting one for >> > consistency would be better. >> > >> > Best Regards, >> > Meral >> > --- >> > Meral Shirazipour >> > Ericsson >> > Research >> > www.ericsson.com
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-… Meral Shirazipour
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… peter van der Stok
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Adrian Farrel
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… peter van der Stok
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Meral Shirazipour