[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-i2rs-pub-sub-requirements-06.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Wed, 04 May 2016 14:01 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-i2rs-pub-sub-requirements-06.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20160429
IETF LC End Date: 20160429
IESG Telechat date: 20160505

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - Abstract page 1, 4.1 page 7 and 4.2.2 page 9: i.e. -> i.e.,

 - ToC page 2 and 2.2 page 5: variants -> Variants

 - ToC page 2 and 7 page 14: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 2.2 page 5: software[sacm-requirements] -> software [sacm-requirements]