Re: [netconf] I-D Action: draft-ietf-netconf-ssh-client-server-32.txt

[tom petch <[e-mail]>]

Some editorial glitches in the three SSH modules

FIPS 186 2 needs adding to the I-D References

RFC7317 is the reference for an import so needs to be Normative

s.1.1 Hyperlinks are provided
Well no, it depends on the format - URL yes, hyperlinks no

            "Acceptable encryption algorithms in order of descending
              preference.
suggest decreasing not descending

s.4.3       "This module defines reusable groupings for SSH servers
I only see one grouping

         Note that this grouping uses fairly typical descendant
          node names such that a stack of 'uses' statements will
suggest nest rather than stack.

             list host-key {
RFC4251 might be a better reference for host keys

                "The 'user name' for the SSH client, as defined in
                  the SSH_MSG_USERAUTH_REQUEST message in RFC 4253.";
RFC4252 not RFC4253

           container hostbased {
  ....
                "RFC 4253: The Secure Shell (SSH) Transport Layer
 RFC4252 or RFC4251 not 4253

Tom Petch



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A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
This draft is a work item of the Network Configuration WG of the IETF.

        Title           : YANG Groupings for SSH Clients and SSH Servers
        Author          : Kent Watsen
  Filename        : draft-ietf-netconf-ssh-client-server-32.txt
  Pages           : 143
  Date            : 2022-12-12

Abstract:
   This document defines three YANG 1.1 modules: the first defines
   features and groupings common to both SSH clients and SSH servers,
   the second defines a grouping for a generic SSH client, and the third
   defines a grouping for a generic SSH server.