Re: [netmod] Last Call: <draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification-06.txt> (YANG Module Classification) to Informational RFC

Hi Jonathan,

See 
https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification-07 
for the applied changes.
The sentence is section 2.2 has been removed: it was too hard to parse 
(and was not strictly needed for this draft).

Regards, Benoit
> Thanks Jonathan,
>
> See in line.
>
>> I have no substantive comments, but have noticed, among other things, 
>> a few somewhat inconsequential typos that could nevertheless impact 
>> readability, particularly for those for whom English is a second 
>> language:
>> • Page 3, penultimate bullet: s/by network operator/by a network operator
>> • Why is figure 1 on page 5 when it is first referenced at the top of 
>> page 4?
>> • Section 2.1, second paragraph (2 typos): s/peole or extarnal/people 
>> or external
>> • Section 2.1, last paragraph: I don't understand the second sentence 
>> that starts: “Although it provides information …”
>> • Section 2.2, second paragraph: i don't understand the first 
>> sentence that starts: “Although the [RFC7950], [RFC7950] …”
> I guess this should be:
>     Although YANG [RFC7950 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc7950>] doesn't explain the relationship of
>     the terms '(YANG) data model' and '(YANG) module', the authors
>     understand there is a 1:1 relationship between a data model and a
>     YANG module, but a data model may also be expressed using a
>     collection of YANG modules (and submodules).  The module provides a
>     coherent data model representation of the software environment
>     consisting of the operating system and applications running on the
>     device.  The decomposition, ordering, and execution of changes to the
>     operating system and application configuration is the task of the
>     agent that implements the module.
> Re-reading this paragraph, its logical place is in the terminology 
> section 1.1, next to data model and module definitions.
>
> Regards, Benoit
>> • Section 3.3, second paragraph: s/include ability/include the ability
>> • Section 6: small point but I believe the second acknowledgement 
>> should be me(!), “Jonathan Hansford”, not “David”
>>
>> Jonathan
>>
>> =O)
>>
>>
>> On 1 May 2017, 03:32 +0100, The IESG <iesg-secretary@ietf.org>, wrote:
>>>
>>> The IESG has received a request from the NETCONF Data Modeling Language
>>> WG (netmod) to consider the following document:
>>> - 'YANG Module Classification'
>>> <draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification-06.txt> as Informational
>>> RFC
>>>
>>> The IESG plans to make a decision in the next few weeks, and solicits
>>> final comments on this action. Please send substantive comments to the
>>> ietf@ietf.org mailing lists by 2017-05-14. Exceptionally, comments 
>>> may be
>>> sent to iesg@ietf.org instead. In either case, please retain the
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>>>
>>> Abstract
>>>
>>>
>>> The YANG data modeling language is currently being considered for a
>>> wide variety of applications throughout the networking industry at
>>> large. Many standards-defining organizations (SDOs), open source
>>> software projects, vendors and users are using YANG to develop and
>>> publish YANG modules for a wide variety of applications. At the same
>>> time, there is currently no well-known terminology to categorize
>>> various types of YANG modules.
>>>
>>> A consistent terminology would help with the categorization of YANG
>>> modules, assist in the analysis of the YANG data modeling efforts in
>>> the IETF and other organizations, and bring clarity to the YANG-
>>> related discussions between the different groups.
>>>
>>> This document describes a set of concepts and associated terms to
>>> support consistent classification of YANG modules.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> The file can be obtained via
>>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification/
>>>
>>> IESG discussion can be tracked via
>>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-netmod-yang-model-classification/ballot/
>>>
>>>
>>> No IPR declarations have been submitted directly on this I-D.
>>>
>>>
>>>
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