Re: [nmrg] Comments welcome on revised NMRG charter

[Alexander Clemm <[e-mail]>]

Hello all,

I think the charter proposal looks fine overall.

One nit re: "The initial focus of the NMRG will be on higher-layer management services that interface with the current Internet management framework."  NMRG has a long tradition, so perhaps it is better to not call it "The initial focus", but to state "The current focus", or perhaps (not ideal) "the initial focus of the current NMRG cycle".

Likewise the statement "The NMRG will investigate in priority three related topics".  This suggests that the listed topics are in priority order, which I don't think is correct - they are simply all topics of priority.  Perhaps rephrase to "The NMRG will prioritize investigation of three related topics", or similar?

There is one typo: "One one hand" (should be "On one hand").

Some more minor comments FWIW (feel free to ignore):

- Third bullet item under IBN "categorize the different forms of intents and define what constitutes a "well-formed" intent; describe how an intent can be expressed and what can be expressed using an intent with means such as information models, grammars, and languages."  I think that arguably the categorization could be covered under terminology; perhaps this bullet should simply focus on the second aspect (how to express intent), which is a more open-ended problem to which several solutions may be put forward.

Since no milestones are listed, is the Milestones section still needed?  (I assume they will be defined as working group documents get adopted.)

Cheers
--- Alex

From: nmrg <[e-mail]> On Behalf Of Ciavaglia, Laurent (Nokia - FR/Paris-Saclay)
Sent: Wednesday, November 20, 2019 1:17 AM
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Subject: Re: [nmrg] Comments welcome on revised NMRG charter

Hello,

In addition to the previous email, a few additional links for your convenience:

  *   Version -01 of NMRG charter: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1e84-M4DEDi-LCXjLG0Wf0JhbPXVcIPm2hnFFIQPrkro/edit?usp=sharing<https://nam03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fdocs.google.com%2Fdocument%2Fd%2F1e84-M4DEDi-LCXjLG0Wf0JhbPXVcIPm2hnFFIQPrkro%2Fedit%3Fusp%3Dsharing&data=02%7C01%7Calex%40futurewei.com%7C33241176de274246eed408d76d9a78d1%7C0fee8ff2a3b240189c753a1d5591fedc%7C1%7C0%7C637098382547674184&sdata=e85hgUuBg71bWNaQUL5iNwVPWrSQYuMx%2B%2BW26KP8TVM%3D&reserved=0>
  *   Comparison between version -01 and -02: https://docs.google.com/document/d/19xidbplhn5gPr41QdeXBTh2WLhoA9kbhNieZiSh0Uyk/edit?usp=sharing<https://nam03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fdocs.google.com%2Fdocument%2Fd%2F19xidbplhn5gPr41QdeXBTh2WLhoA9kbhNieZiSh0Uyk%2Fedit%3Fusp%3Dsharing&data=02%7C01%7Calex%40futurewei.com%7C33241176de274246eed408d76d9a78d1%7C0fee8ff2a3b240189c753a1d5591fedc%7C1%7C0%7C637098382547684192&sdata=U%2BZkwEydIcU26n7GNnMQfwcCMnbr40058ChrQEXPQXs%3D&reserved=0>

Also, to clarify:

  *   The intent of the charter revision is not a complete overhaul but more to capture more recent activities the RG has engaged into and reflect that in an update of the original charter together with a work plan.
You can see in the comparison, that the first part (original charter) has not been changed.

Thank you.
Best regards, Laurent.


From: Ciavaglia, Laurent (Nokia - FR/Paris-Saclay) <[e-mail]<mailto:[e-mail]>>
Sent: Wednesday, November 20, 2019 06:46
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Subject: Comments welcome on revised NMRG charter

Hi NMRG,

Jérôme and I have been working on a new version of the NMRG charter to capture better the current shape and activity of the RG.

We'd like to receive comments from the community. This is on the agenda of the session on Friday.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/14eHQALG95VHE5N-YIAwH6vriKFG2WvI8d63TtugZLgU/edit?usp=sharing<https://nam03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fdocs.google.com%2Fdocument%2Fd%2F14eHQALG95VHE5N-YIAwH6vriKFG2WvI8d63TtugZLgU%2Fedit%3Fusp%3Dsharing&data=02%7C01%7Calex%40futurewei.com%7C33241176de274246eed408d76d9a78d1%7C0fee8ff2a3b240189c753a1d5591fedc%7C1%7C0%7C637098382547694199&sdata=LfR1fw5Q4IshxAbHRn%2F5M5AZXge6kzsL%2BFlLpbI7%2F%2B8%3D&reserved=0>

Thank you.
Best regards, Jérôme & Laurent.