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Re: [OPSAWG] Shepherd review of draft-ietf-opsawg-tacacs-yang

"Wubo (lana)" <lana.wubo@huawei.com> Fri, 29 May 2020 08:34 UTC

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From: "Wubo (lana)" <lana.wubo@huawei.com>
To: "Joe Clarke (jclarke)" <jclarke=40cisco.com@dmarc.ietf.org>, opsawg <opsawg@ietf.org>
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Hi Joe,

Many thanks for the review.
I will correct the errors in the -06 revision.

Thanks,
Bo
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发件人: OPSAWG [mailto:opsawg-bounces@ietf.org] 代表 Joe Clarke (jclarke)
发送时间: 2020年5月28日 22:52
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主题: [OPSAWG] Shepherd review of draft-ietf-opsawg-tacacs-yang

I have completed my first draft of the shepherd write-up of this document.  In the abstract I noticed it says that this document defines “YANG modules” when it only defines “a YANG module” now.  Can text referring to the plural modules be updated?

Also, any other review of the write-up would be appreciated.

https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-opsawg-tacacs-yang/shepherdwriteup/

Joe
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