Re: [PCN] Fwd: [Gen-art] Gen-ARTReviewofdraft-ietf-pcn-baseline-encoding-05

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Replying to my own email. On reading back what I wrote I actually think
it would sound better as:

   The objective of the pre-congestion notification (PCN) architecture 
   is to protect the QoS of inelastic flows within a DiffServ domain. It
   achieves this by marking packets belonging to PCN-flows when the rate
   of traffic exceeds certain configured thresholds on links in the 
   domain.  These marks can then be evaluated to determine how close the

   domain is to being congested.  This document specifies how such marks

   are encoded into the IP header by redefining the Explicit Congestion 
   Notification (ECN) codepoints within such domains.  The baseline 
   encoding described here provides only two PCN encoding states: 
   not-marked and PCN-marked. Future extensions to this encoding may be 
   needed in order to provide more than one level of marking severity.

As I said below this does 3 things: introduces the PCN architecture (if
someone has found this document they probably already know about that),
it explains what PCN-marks are and how they are generated and then it
explains how to encode these into the IP header. The final bit was as
suggested by Phil - we need to give a hint as to why this is a baseline
encoding...

Unless I get really strong pushback against this then I will run with it
when I release the update in the next couple of hours...


> -----Original Message-----
> From: [e-mail] [mailto:[e-mail]] On Behalf Of
> [e-mail]
> Sent: 04 September 2009 12:15
> To: Eardley,PL,Philip,DER3 R; [e-mail]
> Subject: Re: [PCN] Fwd: [Gen-art] Gen-ARTReviewofdraft-ietf-pcn-
> baseline-encoding-05
> 
> As the IETF LC has now finished with no further comments, I am in the
> process of completing the revised draft for the IESG to approve.
> 
> I have decided that Phil has a sound point about the abstract - what
we
> had ended up with last week was effectively a complete introduction to
> the PCN architecture as a whole. I have now crafted a final abstract
> for
> people to see if they approve. I will actually submit the revised
> version by 1600 GMT this afternoon so if people disagree they need to
> shout quickly!
> 
> Before I give the abstract, a few words to explain where it is coming
> from. I think the abstract for the baseline encoding needs to do the
> following: introduce readers to PCN - by which I mean give them a hint
> as to what field this is in, NOT describe PCN in detail...; Then
> introduce PCN marking; then finally explain that this is the baseline
> encoding for that marking...
> 
>    The pre-congestion notification (PCN) architecture is intended to
>    protect the QoS of inelastic flows within a DiffServ domain. In
> order
>    to do this, packets belonging to PCN-flows are marked when the rate
>    of traffic exceeds pre-configured thresholds on a link. These marks
>    can then be evaluated to determine how close the domain is to being
>    congested. This document specifies how such marks are encoded into
>    the IP header by redefining the Explicit Congestion Notification
>    (ECN) codepoints within such domains.  The baseline encoding
>    described here provides only two PCN encoding states: not-marked
>    and PCN-marked. Future extensions to this encoding may be needed to
>    provide more than one level of marking severity.
> 
> Toby
> 
> > -----Original Message-----
> > From: [e-mail] [mailto:[e-mail]] On Behalf
Of
> > [e-mail]
> > Sent: 01 September 2009 16:22
> > To: [e-mail]
> > Subject: Re: [PCN] Fwd: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Reviewofdraft-ietf-pcn-
> > baseline-encoding-05
> >
> > I see there has been a lot of on & off list discussion about
> Spencer's
> > first comment (ie the abstract uses Diffserv domain, not
PCN-domain).
> I
> > wasn't able to read all the discussion because it has grown to 35
> pages
> > (!!!!)
> >
> > I guess I disagree with Spencer's comment.  my view is that the
> general
> > reader is more likely to know what a Diffserv domain is, so that's a
> > better term to use in the abstract. (if the reader wants to
> understand
> > exactly what a PCN-domain is then they read further). But if
insisted
> > on, the easy solution is just to add "called a PCN-domain" after
> > "Diffserv domain". Problem solved.
> >
> > I disagree with the direction that the revised abstract has been
> going.
> > It seems to be trying to write a (longish) paragraph summary of what
> > PCN
> > is. I think that is not needed & in fact is quite a bad idea - it's
a
> > job for the introduction. I think the abstract should just say what
> the
> > Baseline encoding is about. However, I think it's probably ok to
> start
> > with one sentence about the objective of PCN, or a reference to
> > rfc5559.
> >
> > However, I think it might be worth adding to the abstract to explain
> > why
> > this is called the "baseline" encoding, ie there are other encodings
> > building on this one that differentiate two severity levels of
> > PCN-marking. In fact, allowing (/ constraining) encoding extensions
> is
> > an important part of the baseline doc.
> >
> > My suggested abstract is {..optional text..}:-
> >
> >    The objective of Pre-Congestion Notification (PCN) is to protect
> the
> >    quality of service (QoS) of inelastic flows within a Diffserv
> domain
> > {called a PCN-domain}.
> > Within the {PCN-}domain, PCN-nodes mark PCN-packets if the rate of
> > PCN-traffic is too high {as defined in [ref marking behaviour]}.
This
> > document defines how such marks are encoded in the IP header for a
> > 'baseline' encoding that provides for two PCN encoding states
> > (not-marked and PCN-marked). It reuses the ECN codepoint. Other
> > encodings can build on this baseline encoding to provide more than
> two
> > encoding states, in order to distinguish two severity levels of
> > PCN-marking.
> >
> > Toby, I'll leave it to you to decide what you want to do with my
> > comments, as I think there's been plenty enough suggestions already.
> >
> > Best wishes,
> > phil
> >
> >
> > { -----Original Message-----
> > { From: [e-mail] [mailto:[e-mail]] On Behalf
> Of
> > Lars
> > { Eggert
> > { Sent: 25 August 2009 15:12
> > { To: [e-mail]
> > { Subject: [PCN] Fwd: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review
> > ofdraft-ietf-pcn-baseline-
> > { encoding-05
> > {
> > {
> > {
> > { Begin forwarded message:
> > {
> > { > From: Spencer Dawkins <[e-mail]>
> > { > Date: August 25, 2009 14:47:49 GMT+02:00
> > { > To: "[e-mail]"
> > <draft-ietf-
> > { [e-mail]
> > { > >
> > { > Cc: General Area Review Team <[e-mail]>,
> > "[e-mail]
> > { > " 	<[e-mail]>
> > { > Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-pcn-baseline-
> > { > encoding-05
> > { >
> > { > I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
> > { > reviewer for
> > { > this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
> > { > http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).
> > { >
> > { > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD
> before
> > { > posting a
> > { > new version of the draft.
> > { >
> > { > Document: draft-ietf-pcn-baseline-encoding-05
> > { > Reviewer: Spencer Dawkins
> > { > IETF LC End Date: 2009-09-03
> > { > Review Date: 2009-08-21
> > { > IESG Telechat date: (not known)
> > { >
> > { > Summary: this specification is almost ready for publication as a
> > { > Proposed
> > { > Standard. I have one minor question below (flagged as "Spencer
> > { > (minor)"),
> > { > along with some editorial suggestions to be considered when this
> > { > document is
> > { > edited (either in the working group or by the RFC Editor).
> > { >
> > { > Abstract
> > { >
> > { >   The objective of Pre-Congestion Notification (PCN) is to
> protect
> > the
> > { >   quality of service (QoS) of inelastic flows within a Diffserv
> > { > domain.
> > { >
> > { > Spencer (clarity): I'm not sure what the relationship between a
> > { > Diffserv
> > { > domain and a PCN-domain is - this couuld be clearer, especially
> in
> > an
> > { > Abstract. I note that RFC 5559 doesn't use the term PCN-domain
in
> > its
> > { > Abstract ... I can guess, but I'm just guessing.
> > { >
> > { >   The overall rate of the PCN-traffic is metered on every link
in
> > the
> > { >   PCN-domain, and PCN-packets are appropriately marked when
> certain
> > { >   configured rates are exceeded.  The level of marking allows
the
> > { >   boundary nodes to make decisions about whether to admit or
> block
> > a
> > { >   new flow request, and (in abnormal circumstances) whether to
> > { >   terminate some of the existing flows, thereby protecting the
> QoS
> > of
> > { >   previously admitted flows.  This document specifies how such
> > marks
> > { >   are to be encoded into the IP header by re-using the Explicit
> > { >   Congestion Notification (ECN) codepoints within this
controlled
> > { >   domain.  The baseline encoding described here provides for
only
> > two
> > { >   PCN encoding states, Not-marked and PCN-marked.
> > { >
> > { > 4.  Encoding two PCN States in IP
> > { >
> > { >   The following rules apply to all PCN traffic:
> > { >
> > { >   o  PCN-traffic MUST be marked with a PCN-compatible Diffserv
> > { >      Codepoint.  To conserve DSCPs, Diffserv Codepoints SHOULD
be
> > { >      chosen that are already defined for use with admission
> > controlled
> > { >      traffic.  Appendix A.1 gives guidance to implementiors on
> > { > suitable
> > { >
> > { > Spencer (clarity): s/implementiors/implementers/?
> > { >
> > { >      DSCPs.  Guidelines for mixing traffic-types within a PCN-
> > domain
> > { >      are given in [I-D.ietf-pcn-marking-behaviour].
> > { >
> > { >   o  Any packet that is not-PCN but which shares the same
> Diffserv
> > { >      codepoint as PCN-enabled traffic MUST have the ECN field of
> > its
> > { >      outermost IP header equal to 00.
> > { >
> > { > Spencer (minor): this is the only point in the specification
> (that
> > I
> > { > can
> > { > find) that makes reference to the "outermost IP header". I'm not
> > sure
> > { > whether to suggest s/outermost// here or to ask that a statement
> be
> > { > added
> > { > earlier in the document to clearly state that PCN encoding only
> > { > protects
> > { > inelastic traffic when it's used for the outermost IP header,
but
> > the
> > { > current text seems to call attention to this in a way that makes
> > the
> > { > reader
> > { > wonder what is special about THIS requirement that isn't true of
> > the
> > { > other
> > { > requirements listed.
> > { >
> > { > 4.3.  PCN-Compatible Diffserv Codepoints
> > { >
> > { >   Enabling PCN marking behaviour for a specific DSCP disables
any
> > { > other
> > { >   marking behaviour (e.g. enabling PCN disables the default ECN
> > { > marking
> > { >   behaviour introduced in [RFC3168]).  All traffic metering and
> > { > marking
> > { >
> > { > Spencer (clarity): here, and in Section 6, the text uses
> "disables"
> > to
> > { > describe the relationship between PCN and ECN. If I understand
> the
> > { > point,
> > { > the domain is substituting one behavior for another. I might
> > suggest
> > { > "replaces" to describe the relationship in both locations.
> > { >
> > { >   behaviours are discussed in [I-D.ietf-pcn-marking-behaviour].
> > This
> > { >   ensures compliance with the BCP guidance set out in [RFC4774].
> > { >
> > { > 4.3.1.  Co-existence of PCN and not-PCN traffic
> > { >
> > { >   The scarcity of pool 1 DSCPs coupled with the fact that PCN is
> > { >   envisaged as a marking behaviour that could be applied to a
> > number
> > { > of
> > { >   different DSCPs makes it essential that we provide a not-PCN
> > state.
> > { >   As stated above (and expanded in Appendix A.1) the aim is for
> PCN
> > to
> > { >   re-use existing DSCPs.  Because PCN re-defines the meaning of
> the
> > { > ECN
> > { >
> > { > Spencer (clarity): here, the text uses "re-defines", which I
like
> > { > better
> > { > than "disables", but if you go for "replaces" previously and in
> > { > section 6,
> > { > you might want to use the same wording here.
> > { >
> > { >   field for such DSCPs it is important to allow an operator to
> > still
> > { >   use the DSCP for traffic that isn't PCN-enabled.  This is
> > achieved
> > { > by
> > { >   providing a not-PCN state within the encoding scheme.
> > { >
> > { > A.1.  Choice of Suitable DSCPs
> > { >
> > { >   The PCN Working Group chose not to define a single DSCP for
use
> > with
> > { >   PCN for several reasons.  Firstly the PCN mechanism is
> applicable
> > to
> > { >   a variety of different traffic classes.  Secondly standards
> track
> > { >   DSCPs are in increasingly short supply.  Thirdly PCN should be
> > seen
> > { >   as being essentially a marking behaviour similar to ECN but
> > intended
> > { >   for inelastic traffic.  The choice of which DSCP is most
> suitable
> > { > for
> > { >   a given PCN-domain is dependent on the nature of the traffic
> > { > entering
> > { >   that domain and the link rates of all the links making up that
> > { >   domain.  In PCN-domains with uniformly high link rates, the
> > { >   appropriate DSCPs would currently be those for the Real Time
> > Traffic
> > { >   Class [RFC5127].  To be clear the PCN Working Group recommends
> > using
> > { >
> > { > Spencer (clarity): is this 2119 language (apparently not, since
> > this
> > { > section
> > { > is not normative), or are you saying "suggests"? My suggestion
is
> > { > that we
> > { > not use 2119 language, even lowercased, except for normative
text
> -
> > { > this
> > { > seems to cause confusion from time to time. But please check
with
> > your
> > { > shepherding AD to see if he agrees.
> > { >
> > { >   admission control for the following service classes:
> > { >
> > { >   o  Telephony (EF)
> > { >
> > { >   o  Real-time interactive (CS4)
> > { >
> > { >   o  Broadcast Video (CS3)
> > { >
> > { >   o  Multimedia Conferencing (AF4)
> > { >
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