Re: [regext] I-D Action: draft-ietf-regext-epp-registry-maintenance-05.txt

Hi Jim,

Thank you for your swift feedback.

We will go through it and make the adjustments where needed.

Best,
Tobias

> On 1. Dec 2020, at 15:35, Gould, James <jgould=40verisign.com@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:
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> In reviewing draft-ietf-regext-epp-registry-maintenance-05, below is my feedback:
>  
> Replace “defnition” with “definition” in two places.
> Section 2.3 Maintenance Elements
> I would modify the description of the <maint:item> element.  Specifically, change the second sentence to read like “This element is used in a maintenance item EPP <info> response and <poll> message.”.
> Section 3.1.3.1 “Query one maintenance item”
> The name “Query one maintenance item” could be shortened to “Info Maintenance Item”.
> I would explicitly define the Info Maintenance Item command element (<maint:id>) without making the reference to Section 2.3, since Section 2.3 defines the Info Maintenance Item Response. 
> The command example incorrectly references <maint:impact>blackout</maint:impact> instead of <maint:impact>full</maint:impact>.
> The dates in the response example should be updated to more recent dates (e.g., update 2017 to 2020)
> I would define the response similar to:
>                                                                i.      When an <info> command has been processed successfully, the EPP <resData> element MUST contain a child <maint:infData> element that identifies the maintenance namespace.  The <maint:infData> element contains the <maint:item> element defined in Section 2.3.
> Section 3.1.3.2 “Query maintenance list”
> The name could be updated to “Info Maintenance List”.
> I would explicitly define the Info Maintenance List element (<maint:list/>), which is an empty element to indicate an Info Maintenance List command.
> The dates in the response example should be updated to more recent dates (e.g., update 2017 to 2020)
> I would define the response similar to:
>                                                                i.      When an <info> command has been processed successfully, the EPP <resData> element MUST contain a child <maint:infData> element that identifies the maintenance namespace.  The <maint:infData> element contains the <maint:list> element with a list of <maint:listItem> elements.  The <maint:listItem> element contains the following child elements:
> 1.  <maint:id>: <maint:id> defined in Section 2.3.
> 2.  <maint:start>: <maint:start> defined in Section 2.3.
> 3.  <maint:end>: <maint:end> defined in Section 2.3.
> 4.  <maint:crDate>: <maint:crDate> defined in Section 2.3.
> 5.  <maint:upDate>: OPTIONAL <maint:upDate> defined in Section 2.3.
> Sect 3.1.4 “EPP <poll> Command”
> The dates in the poll response example should be updated to more recent dates (e.g., update 2017 to 2020)
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> -- 
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> JG
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> James Gould
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>     A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
>     This draft is a work item of the Registration Protocols Extensions WG of the IETF.
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>             Title           : Registry Maintenance Notifications for the Extensible Provisioning Protocol (EPP)
>             Authors         : Tobias Sattler
>                               Roger Carney
>                               Jody Kolker
>                 Filename        : draft-ietf-regext-epp-registry-maintenance-05.txt
>                 Pages           : 20
>                 Date            : 2020-12-01
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>     Abstract:
>        This document describes an Extensible Provision Protocol (EPP)
>        mapping for registry's maintenance notifications.
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