[Roll] John Scudder's Discuss on draft-ietf-roll-aodv-rpl-10: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)

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A lot of effort has clearly gone into this work, thank you. I do have one topic
I want to DISCUSS, as it seriously impacted the readability of the document
from my point of view. I don’t anticipate that it will be very difficult to
resolve this DISCUSS as it relates to clarity and not to anything fundamental.

My chief difficulty with the document is placing it in context. No hints are
given to the reader as to what the expected network environment is. I think it
would be almost sufficient to say, for example “the network environment is
assumed to be the same as described in RFC 6550, Section 1” for example, but
without that hint and without a strong background in ROLL, I found myself
struggling. Figures 4 and 5 in particular lead me to believe the expected
environment looks similar to a classic ISP network — a collection of nodes
connected by point-to-point links. If this isn’t correct (and I bet it’s not)
that may have led me into incorrect assumptions, which may be reflected in my
other comments below.

Further, it’s not stated anywhere whether AODV-RPL is intended to stand alone
as its own routing protocol, or to be viewed as an extension of RPL. In the
former case, it seems the document is lacking details that are present in RFC
6550. I’m assuming the latter is the case, but a clear statement to that effect
seems indicated.


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1. Section 1:

   Reply.  AODV-RPL currently omits some features compared to AODV -- in
   particular, flagging Route Errors, blacklisting unidirectional links,
   multihoming, and handling unnumbered interfaces.

Your use of language is entirely up to you, but I feel obliged to point out
that there’s been a lot of discussion in the IETF community recently about use
of language that raises sensitive points, and about the term “blacklisting” in
particular. I understand that this is the only place in the document the term
appears, and since it refers to AODV you can’t just use another term, but
placing it in quotation marks might make it clear that it’s referring verbatim
to the language of RFC 3561.

2. Section 1:

  support for storing and non-storing modes.  AODV adds basic messages
  RREQ and RREP as part of RPL DIO (DODAG Information Object) control

Did you mean “AODV-RPL adds”?

3. Section 2:

   Symmetric route
      The upstream and downstream routes traverse the same routers.

Same routers? Or same links? (Or both, if multi-access links are part of the
mix, as I imagine they may be?)

4. Section 4.1:

   OrigNode sets its IPv6 address in the DODAGID field of the RREQ-DIO
   message.  A RREQ-DIO message MUST carry exactly one RREQ option,

Should that say “one of its IPv6 addresses"? Is it even necessary to restate
this? RFC 6550 §6.3.1 already has a clearer requirement:

   DODAGID: 128-bit IPv6 address set by a DODAG root that uniquely
         identifies a DODAG.  The DODAGID MUST be a routable IPv6
         address belonging to the DODAG root.

5. Section S4.1:

  TargNode can join the RREQ instance at a Rank whose integer portion
  is equal to the MaxRank.

Not less than or equal, right? Strict equality to MaxRank is required?

6. Section 4.2:

   TargNode sets its IPv6 address in the DODAGID field of the RREP-DIO
   message.  A RREP-DIO message MUST carry exactly one RREP option,

Same as #4.

7. Section 4.2:

  Address Vector
     Only present when the H bit is set to 0.  For an asymmetric route,
     the Address Vector represents the IPv6 addresses of the route that
     the RREP-DIO has passed.

The first time I read through this, I didn’t understand it at all. On
re-reading, I think you’re using the word “route” in two different ways in the
same sentence, the first time to mean “route” in the sense of an object in the
protocol, the second time in the more casual sense of “a path through the
network”. If that’s right, I suggest rewriting the second instance, as in “…
represents the IPv6 addresses of the path through the network the RREP-DIO has
traversed.”

Also, as in point #4, is it right to say *the* IPv6 addresses? Couldn’t any
given node have various IPv6 addresses? So maybe just lose the definite
article, as in “… represents IPv6 addresses of the path…”?

8. Section 4.3:

  r
     A one-bit reserved field.  This field MUST be initialized to zero
     by the sender and MUST be ignored by the receiver.

The figure doesn’t show an “r” field. I assume the field labeled “X” should be
relabeled as “r”?

9. Section 5:

   Figure 4.  If an intermediate router sends out RREQ-DIO with the S
   bit set to 1, then all the one-hop links on the route from the
   OrigNode O to this router meet the requirements of route discovery,

On first reading I didn’t understand this. Having read the whole document, I
now get it (I think!). Possibly changing “meet” to “have met” would have been
enough to get me past my initial befuddlement.

10. Section 5:

   The criteria used to determine whether or not each link is symmetric
   is beyond the scope of the document.  For instance, intermediate

Should be “criterion … is beyond", or "criteria … are beyond", depending on
whether you want singular or plural.

11. Section 5:

  routers can use local information (e.g., bit rate, bandwidth, number
  of cells used in 6tisch)

I wouldn’t have minded a reference for 6tisch.

12. Section 5:

   Upon receiving a RREQ-DIO with the S bit set to 1, a node determines
   whether this one-hop link can be used symmetrically, i.e., both the
   two directions meet the requirements of data transmission.  If the
   RREQ-DIO arrives over an interface that is not known to be symmetric,
   or is known to be asymmetric, the S bit is set to 0.  If the S bit
   arrives already set to be '0', it is set to be '0' on retransmission

The term “retransmission” seems misused here. I guess you mean something like
“when the RREQ-DIO is propagated”.

13. Section 5:

  Appendix A describes an example method using the upstream Expected
  Number of Transmissions" (ETX) and downstream Received Signal
  Strength Indicator (RSSI) to estimate whether the link is symmetric
  in terms of link quality is given in using an averaging technique.

This sentence needs a rewrite to make it grammatical. It works up until "is
given in using an averaging technique”.

14. Section 6.2.1:

     If the S bit in the received RREQ-DIO is set to 1, the router MUST
     determine whether each direction of the link (by which the RREQ-
     DIO is received) satisfies the Objective Function.  In case that
     the downward (i.e. towards the TargNode) direction of the link
     does not satisfy the Objective Function, the link can't be used
     symmetrically, thus the S bit of the RREQ-DIO to be sent out MUST
     be set as 0.  If the S bit in the received RREQ-DIO is set to 0,
     the router MUST determine into the upward direction (towards the
     OrigNode) of the link.

The last sentence doesn’t make sense.

15. Section 6.2.1:

     If the router is an intermediate router, then it transmits a RREQ-
     DIO via link-local multicast;

On what interface? Routers generally can have multiple interfaces. Again, this
is a place a clear description of the network environment might have helped.

16. Section 6.2.2:

  If the OrigNode tries to reach multiple TargNodes in a single RREQ-
  Instance, one of the TargNodes can be an intermediate router to the
  others, therefore it MUST continue sending RREQ-DIO to reach other
  targets.  In this case, before rebroadcasting the RREQ-DIO

The use of the term “broadcast” here confuses me. Is this “broadcast” in the RF
sense? Again, this is a place a clear description of the network environment
might have helped.

17. Section 6.2.2:

  send out any RREQ-DIO.  For the purposes of determining the
  intersection with previous incoming RREQ-DIOs, the intermediate
  router maintains a record of the targets that have been requested
  associated with the RREQ-Instance.  Any RREQ-DIO message with
  different ART Options coming from a router with higher Rank is
  ignored.

It’s not clear to me if the last sentence goes with the previous and if so,
how. Does it even relate to multiple targets? Also, different from what? If it
has the same ART Options (same as what?) is it *not* ignored?

18. Section 6.3.1:

  implementation-specific and out of scope.  If the implementation
  selects the symmetric route, and the L bit is not 0, the TargNode MAY
  delay transmitting the RREP-DIO for duration RREP_WAIT_TIME to await
  a symmetric route with a lower Rank.  The value of RREP_WAIT_TIME is
  set by default to 1/4 of the time duration determined by the L bit.

It’s not an L bit though, it’s an L field.

19. Section 6.3.2:

  multicast until the OrigNode is reached or MaxRank is exceeded.  The
  TargNode MAY delay transmitting the RREP-DIO for duration
  RREP_WAIT_TIME to await a route with a lower Rank.  The value of
  RREP_WAIT_TIME is set by default to 1/4 of the time duration
  determined by the L bit.

Again, it’s an L field. Also, what if L is zero? Is RREP_WAIT_TIME set to
infinity, as the text implies?

Please do a global search for “L bit”, as there are additional instances I
haven’t called out.

20. Section 6.4:

  Step 4:

      If the receiver is the OrigNode, it can start transmitting the
      application data to TargNode along the path as provided in RREP-
      Instance, and processing for the RREP-DIO is complete.  Otherwise,
      in case of an asymmetric route, the intermediate router MUST
      include the address of the interface receiving the RREP-DIO into
      the address vector, and then transmit the RREP-DIO via link-local
      multicast.  In case of a symmetric route, the RREP-DIO message is

As with #15: on what interface(s)?

21. Section 10:

  fake AODV-RPL route discoveries.  In this type of scenario, RPL's
  preinstalled mode of operation, where the key to use for a P2P-RPL
  route discovery is preinstalled, SHOULD be used.

What type of scenario is that?

22. Appendix A:

s/pakcet/packet/

23. General remark:

Although “acknowledgements” isn’t a required section I was a little surprised
not to encounter it, as it’s usually present. Your call of course.