Re: [Roll] Write Up draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection-30
Ines Robles <mariainesrobles@googlemail.com> Tue, 03 January 2023 21:00 UTC
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From: Ines Robles <mariainesrobles@googlemail.com>
Date: Tue, 03 Jan 2023 22:59:22 +0200
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Subject: Re: [Roll] Write Up draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection-30
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Many thanks Pascal for addressing the comments, found minor issues in version 31 (apologizes if I miss them in version 30). Section 11.2: "...under the heading "Routing Protocol for Low Power and Lossy Networks (RPL)", should it be " ..under the header "IPv6 Low Power Personal Area Network Parameters".." based on https://www.iana.org/assignments/_6lowpan-parameters/_6lowpan-parameters.xhtml#elective-6lowpan-routing-header-type Same as section 11.3: "...under the heading "Routing Protocol for Low Power and Lossy Networks (RPL)", should it be " ..under the header "IPv6 Low Power Personal Area Network Parameters".." based on https://www.iana.org/assignments/_6lowpan-parameters/_6lowpan-parameters.xhtml#critical-6lowpan-routing-header-type Section 11.15: 1- ..ICMPv6 Code Fields Registry --> ICMPv6 "Code" Fields Registry 2- ICMPv6 Message Type 1 --> ICMPv6 Message Type 1 "Destination Unreachable" ? 3- The code 8 is already assigned to "Headers too long" [ RFC8883], but I think IANA can assign another code number Section 11.16: Statuss --> Status Many thanks and Happy New Year Ines. On Tue, Jan 3, 2023 at 4:57 PM Pascal Thubert (pthubert) <pthubert@cisco.com> wrote: > Dear Ines > > > > Many thanks for your in depth shepherd review! > > > > Let's see below, > > > > 1-Section 2.4.5.1 states "A RPL Local Instance ID", based on section 4.1.1 > > trackID definition includes global as well, thus TrackID in section 2.4.5.1 > > should it be "A RPL Local (or Global) Instance ID ...?" > > > > > It can be either though the expectation is to use local instances. I'm > scanning through the doc to ensure its left open. > > > > 2- Section 2.4.5.3 states: "A Track that has only one path", should it be: > "A > > Track that has only one path from Ingress to Egress?" > > > > > WFM > > > > 3- Section 2.4.5.8.1: The segment example, could it be formulated based on > > Figure 1 or Figure 6? If so, could the figure number be added into > brackets for > > better understanding of the reader. > > > > > good idea, done. > > > > 4- In Section 3.5.1.1 reads: "Packets originated by A to F ....", should > it be > > " Data Packets originated by A to F ...?" > > > > Well there's no checking in the forwarding operation that it is a "Data" > packet. > > > > > > 5- Section 3.5.2.3: > > 5.1: "are sent A" --> "are sent to A" > > > > > OK > > > > 5.2: Table 16. Column P-DAO 1 to C, row Targets. It is empty, is that Ok, > or > > should it be "E"? > > > > > See in section 3.5. Serial Track Signaling: "the Egress of a Non-Storing > Mode P-DAO is an implicit Target that is not listed in the RPL Target > Options." So there's no target signaled (no RTO) but E is implicitly a > destination as shown in the RIB in table 17. > > > > 6- Section 3.6: the sentence "...and Inter-Leg Segments (aka North-South), > such > > as Segment 2 above which joins Leg 1 and Leg 2..." > > > > 6.1: Should it be Segment 5 instead of 2? (Segment 5 is North-South?) > > > > > oups yes! Thanks 😊 > > > > 6.2: Or it is Segment 2 and both legs 1 and 2 are joined by node "E"? > > > > > E is the Egress (and I is the Ingress) > > > > 6.3: Segment 5 is composed only by nodes "B" and "H", right? > > > > > right in this picture. Could be more hops. > > > > 7- Section 4.1: "as usual" --> "as specified in > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/rfc6550/" ? > > > > > Well that's true for all IP routing, longest match in FIB. I changed to > "as normal". > > > > 8- Section 4.1.1: "...The 'P' flag is encoded in bit position 2 (to be > > confirmed by IANA)..." It would be nice to point the IANA Section where it > > belongs, e.g. "...The 'P' flag is encoded in bit position 2 (IANA Request > > section 11.13 or Table 31)..." > > > > > done > > > > > > 9- Section 4.1.2: Same as above for "1-bit flag (position to be confirmed > by > > IANA)", for IANA Section 11.14/Table 32 > > > > > done > > > > > > 10- Section 5.3: > > 10.1- Figure 16: "Type" --> "Option Type" > > > > > done > > > > 10.2- In The Field descriptions, the description of the "Flags" field is > > missing. It would be nice to add 1 sentence about the flags. > > > > > done > > > > 10.2.1- Is this flags field related to the IANA Request of Section 11.11? > If > > so, please add it into the description. > > > > > done for SIO and VIO > > > > 11-Section 5.4: it reads "...An industrial Alliance that uses RPL for a > > particular use / environment MAY redefine the use of this field to fit its > > needs..." It would be nice to adapt it to include wider scenarios/use > cases. > > For e.g. "In some scenarios such as the case of an Industrial Alliances > that > > uses RPL for a particular use / environment MAY redefine the use of this > field > > to fit its needs..." > > > > > done > > > > > > 12- Section 6.4.2: Figure 18, It would be nice to mark in the Figure the > > Ingress and the Egress as in Figure 19. > > > > > done > > > > 13- Section 11.11, reads "No bit is currently assigned for the PDR-ACK > Flags." > > --> "No bit is currently assigned for the VIO Flags." ? > > > > > done > > > > I pushed the result as > https://github.com/roll-wg/dao-projection/commit/217e5c5442df82266bb4d29888e4a450278e303e, > and resolved issue 20 since there was no contentious item. I also published > https://www.ietf.org/staging/draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection-31.html, the > ball is now back in your camp 😊 > > > > Many thanks again, Ines, and Happy new year! > > > > Pascal > > > > > > > > > > *From:* Ines Robles <mariainesrobles@googlemail.com> > *Sent:* vendredi 30 décembre 2022 21:03 > *To:* draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection@ietf.org > *Cc:* dominique barthel <dominique.barthel@orange.com>; roll < > roll@ietf.org> > *Subject:* Write Up draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection-30 > > > > Dear authors, > > > > Please find the write up for dao projection: > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection/shepherdwriteup/ > > > > There are some minor issues for version 30 created in the ticket > https://github.com/roll-wg/dao-projection/issues/20. As soon as these > issues are resolved, we believe, it can be submitted to the IESG. > > > > Many thanks and happy 2023!!! > > > > Ines. >
- [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection-25 Ines Robles
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Ines Robles
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Remous-Aris Koutsiamanis
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Pascal Thubert (pthubert)
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Remous-Aris Koutsiamanis
- [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection-26 Ines Robles
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… dominique.barthel
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Ines Robles
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… dominique.barthel
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Michael Richardson
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Pascal Thubert (pthubert)
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Pascal Thubert (pthubert)
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Michael Richardson
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Pascal Thubert (pthubert)
- Re: [Roll] WGLC for draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Michael Richardson
- [Roll] Write Up draft-ietf-roll-dao-projection-30 Ines Robles
- Re: [Roll] Write Up draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Pascal Thubert (pthubert)
- Re: [Roll] Write Up draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Alvaro Retana
- Re: [Roll] Write Up draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Ines Robles
- Re: [Roll] Write Up draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Ines Robles
- Re: [Roll] Write Up draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Pascal Thubert (pthubert)
- Re: [Roll] Write Up draft-ietf-roll-dao-projectio… Ines Robles