Re: [rtcweb] I-D Action: draft-ietf-rtcweb-data-protocol-04.txt

On 09 Apr 2014, at 16:19, Barry Dingle <btdingle@gmail.com> wrote:

> Data Channel Establishment Protocol Editorials - 
> 
> Section 4 - 2nd paragraph - 
> 
> Change  
> "The set of consistent properties includes "   to the following 
> 
> 
> 
> 
> "The set of consistent properties includes : "   
Done.
> 
> Section 4 - 3rd para (after the 6 dot points), 2nd sentence reads as follows -  
> "The side wanting to open a data channel selects an SCTP stream identifier for which the
>    corresponding incoming and outgoing SCTP stream is unused and sends a
>    DATA_CHANNEL_OPEN message on this outgoing SCTP stream. "
> 
> This is confusing. I suggest it be simplified to - 
> "The side wanting to open a data channel selects an unused
>  SCTP stream identifier   and sends a
>    DATA_CHANNEL_OPEN message on this outgoing SCTP stream. "
But it is the pair of streams which are unused, not the stream identifier.
Is

The side wanting to open a data channel selects an SCTP stream identifier for which the
corresponding incoming and outgoing SCTP streams are unused and sends a
DATA_CHANNEL_OPEN message on the outgoing SCTP stream.

better?

Best regards
Michael
> 
> 
> Cheers,
> /Barry Dingle
> Australia
> 
> 
> On Wed, Apr 9, 2014 at 8:03 PM, <internet-drafts@ietf.org> wrote:
> 
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
>  This draft is a work item of the Real-Time Communication in WEB-browsers Working Group of the IETF.
> 
>         Title           : WebRTC Data Channel Establishment Protocol
>         Authors         : Randell Jesup
>                           Salvatore Loreto
>                           Michael Tuexen
>         Filename        : draft-ietf-rtcweb-data-protocol-04.txt
>         Pages           : 12
>         Date            : 2014-04-09
> 
> Abstract:
>    The Web Real-Time Communication (WebRTC) working group is charged to
>    provide protocols to support for direct interactive rich
>    communication using audio, video, and data between two peers' web-
>    browsers.  This document specifies a simple protocol for establishing
>    symmetric data channels between the peers.  It uses a two way
>    handshake and allows sending of user data without waiting for the
>    handshake to complete.
> 
> 
> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-rtcweb-data-protocol/
> 
> There's also a htmlized version available at:
> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-rtcweb-data-protocol-04
> 
> A diff from the previous version is available at:
> http://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-rtcweb-data-protocol-04
> 
> 
> Please note that it may take a couple of minutes from the time of submission
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> 
> Internet-Drafts are also available by anonymous FTP at:
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