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Re: [T2TRG] Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: (with COMMENT)

Xavier De Foy <Xavier.DeFoy@InterDigital.com> Fri, 15 September 2023 18:55 UTC

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From: Xavier De Foy <Xavier.DeFoy@InterDigital.com>
To: Xavier De Foy <Xavier.DeFoy@InterDigital.com>, Melinda Shore <mshore@fastly.com>, The IRSG <irsg@irtf.org>
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Subject: Re: [T2TRG] Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: (with COMMENT)
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Hi Melinda, we posted an update which we hope will address your comments (in addition to addressing some nits provided by Carsten).
Thank you again for your review,
Xavier.

Name: draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge
Revision: 10
Title: IoT Edge Challenges and Functions
Date: 2023-09-15
Group: t2trg
Pages: 37
URL: https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-10.txt
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-----Original Message-----
From: Xavier De Foy <Xavier.DeFoy@InterDigital.com> 
Sent: Wednesday, August 23, 2023 21:24
To: Melinda Shore <mshore@fastly.com>; The IRSG <irsg@irtf.org>
Cc: draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge@ietf.org; t2trg-chairs@ietf.org; t2trg@irtf.org; ari.keranen@ericsson.com
Subject: RE: Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: (with COMMENT)

Hi Melinda, thank you for your review. We will prepare an update to address your points.
Best Regards,
Xavier

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Subject: Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: (with COMMENT)

Melinda Shore has entered the following ballot position for
draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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The content is very useful but the document itself could probably benefit from some copy editing.  There are a number of instances of unidiomatic English in sections 3 and 4, and there are some other minor issues (tautological definition of "thing" in section 2.1, "mist computing" is defined but never used, etc.).  The intro to section 3 says that some applications can generate a terabyte but never says what it's a terabyte of.  None of these should be considered show-stoppers, just a little untidy.  Overall I think it's a very good read, and, minor issues aside, ready to go.

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