[T2TRG] Melinda Shore's No Objection on draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: (with COMMENT)

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Melinda Shore has entered the following ballot position for
draft-irtf-t2trg-iot-edge-09: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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The content is very useful but the document itself could probably benefit from
some copy editing.  There are a number of instances of unidiomatic English in
sections 3 and 4, and there are some other minor issues (tautological
definition of "thing" in section 2.1, "mist computing" is defined but never
used, etc.).  The intro to section 3 says that some applications can generate a
terabyte but never says what it's a terabyte of.  None of these should be
considered show-stoppers, just a little untidy.  Overall I think it's a very
good read, and, minor issues aside, ready to go.